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nehs311014   
Aug 11, 2018
Writing Feedback / IELTS wirting task2 subjects for university students to study [2]

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

decision about curriculum in universities



Answer:
People's view differing in terms of whether university students should be given the decisions to choose the subjects they want to study. In my opinion, I partly agree with this statement.

On the one hand, it cannot be denied that there are some benefits to let students decide their own study courses. The main reason is that in the modern era, new developments are throughout integration of knowledge from different fields. Without confining students to study in the particular courses, they are able to learn knowledge in wide range of areas and possibly apply in their works in the future. Furthermore, most university students are in their young age, so they need chances to try different fields. Making students to only learn the subjects which seemingly useful in the future not only restricts the possibility to explore their talents but also ignore the fact that they might not be suitable or not interested in studying those courses.

On the other hand, some people argue that university students should study some particular subjects which are arranged rather than base on their interests. It is true that being skilled in a specific field will be more practical than choosing courses without any study plan. After all, it may be risk if students learn courses in various areas and end up having no talents. Moreover, in this way university will be able to ensure their students learn some basic and useful subjects which might at least help them to get a better jobs after they graduated.

In conclusion, I believe it will be more appropriate for university students to study some particular subjects as well as the optional subjects they are interested in.

(280 words)
nehs311014   
Aug 11, 2018
Writing Feedback / ielts writing task 2 - ILLEGAL TO REJECT JOB'S APPLICANTS BASED ON THEIR AGE [3]

@zahranatsir
I think that your got the great opening ,however, there are some mistakes in the main paragraphs.
1."On Under this conditions,..."
2. "... they will not be strong enough ..."
3."have a vigorous body and healthy"

healthy is an adjective which should be use after be -verb

4. In my opinion, the conclusion will be better to be short and only repeat your opinion again.
hope these will help~
nehs311014   
Aug 11, 2018
Writing Feedback / Data of Trenton-Mercer Airport, Paying Passengers in New Jersey. [3]

Hi@sillyman2000, I think your essay is well-structured, however, I found some mistakes.
1." slightly increased of by 3000 people"
you can use either "by" or "to" after increase but they use in the different ways:
increaseby is used to show the change
increase to is used before the new figure

2." kept accelerating"
a little spelling mistake
nehs311014   
Aug 9, 2018
Writing Feedback / Agriculture development didn't solved the hunger problem over the world [5]

world hunger



In spite of the advantages made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

Answer:
Although the improvement have made in the techniques of agriculture, there are still lots of people facing huger around the world. This essay will discuss about the causes and the solutions of this issue.

There are several sound reasons to explain why agriculture progress does not help to alleviate the world hunger. One of the reasons is that people live in the environment with sufficient food usually take it for granted and forget there are still people in somewhere are deprived. Therefore, they tend to produce more wasted food which worsens the problem. Another is that people who live in poverty or suffer from wars may not be able to buy or have the access of food. For example, the documentary shows that poor in the USA do not have enough money to buy three meals a day, so they constantly face starvation.

There are possible measures can be taken by different group of people which may help to relieve the situation. Firstly, the governments should provide food or relief fund for the citizens who are in hunger. Secondly, international charities can raise fund all over the world and help those who are in need. Finally, it is important for the rich to be compassionate toward others and stop wasting precious food. After all, according to the statistic, the world food production is actually sufficient to provide everyone, so the problem was caused by us.

In conclusion, although world hunger is a growing concern in the world, it can be alleviated by proper approaches.

(254 words)
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