Undergraduate / "the bustling cafe" - Common App- Significant Experience [2]

(I'm answering the Common App prompt about a significant experience.)

This is the 2nd paragraph from my essay about a dramatic, soul-searching experience that took place while I was trying to find an essay topic. I would like some help on how to re-phrase this. Thanks!

"After an hour drive up the turnpike, a cab ride to Union Square, and an escalator two flights up, I arrived in the bustling café. My Dad, sister, and I sat down with Chelsea, my essay writing tutor. Chelsea started by asking basic questions about where I want to go to school, my grades, all things that I was able to answer confidently. Then she started asking more detailed questions about my personality. I felt nervous and it was not easy for me, because she would always ask me "why" and other questions that I didn't really have an answer for. Then out of nowhere, she asked my family to leave. I was less at ease, but I was able to answer honestly without my family hearing my feelings and opinions."