Just going to be one of the xxxxxx amount of other people who post their UCF essay about a personal or academic obstacle they've encountered. But I love the constructive criticism, thanks people! =]
The impact my parent's divorce has had on my life is extenuating, due to the fact that my parents live in separate countries. In a way, it's been to my best advantage to experience living in two different places. I have learned to adapt and grow in opposite environments, and discovered how to be flexible when starting something new. Each place in the world has something unique to offer to the human experience, whether it is beautiful landscapes or friendly inhabitants. My history of moving back and forth between households has taught me to appreciate and accept every opportunity that is presented. I loved living in Canada and growing up with a very supportive family. There was snow, and sharp, biting cold, but I never regretted being there. I started my first two years of high school not knowing a single person, but by the end I had many friends. It seems so simple to move to a new place, to orient yourself with a new culture and surroundings. In truth, it is no easy thing at all, but because I have the chance to try it, I know I can be successful in any place I choose to make my home. The transition of moving back to Florida was more difficult than it had been starting anew in Canada, but my experience allowed me to adjust and find things to like about the Sunshine State. I know I will have very little problems adapting to college life, and I would love to have the chance to make UCF a third home.
I really like your last sentence, but I feel like you should describe more on the differences in living in Florida and Canada. It seems as though you talk more on how the divorce has helped you rather than the obstacle of the divorce itself. Otherwise, I liked your essay a lot, going through a similar experience.
Try to describe more about your feelings towards moving back and forth. Also, I don't think that is the correct usage of the word "extenuating".
I love your essay and I can certainly relate since I've moved too and it was also hard for me to adapt when I moved back here to Florida. I think you did a good job of showing that.
thanks for the feedback! I rewrote it and tried to show my feelings a little more, please tell me if it is any better. (also, i find florida is an extremely hard place to adapt to, i'm glad you were able to get used to it too =])
