Johnlee94
May 15, 2021
Writing Feedback / Should people accept the bad situations or try to improve it? [3]
@Holt thank you so much for your comment.
@Holt thank you so much for your comment.
Johnlee94
May 14, 2021
Writing Feedback / Should people accept the bad situations or try to improve it? [3]
Please have your comments on the answer below in terms of Lexical Resources and Grammar Accuracy.
Many thanks.
Topic:
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation , such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
The answer:
It is not only in our contemporary society, life has been most of the time believed to be challenging. Some difficulties in life such as being broke or unhappy jobs are sometimes accepted by people; nonetheless, there are also people always seeking for solutions and improvements. For me, I side with the latter idea.
There are some justifications explaining for reasons why people opt to do nothing with their bad situations. One of them is due to their pessimism. Those who always think of the possibilities of failures and barriers would never make a move forwards. In this case, they find no reasons to make efforts to improve their circumstances and forfeit their benefits. Besides that, there are also people have a desire for a change but do not have a problem-solving skills. Consequently, having no clues to do people feel less encouraged or feasible to strive for an improvement. As a result, this type of people choose for doing nothing for their bad events.
On contrast, the reverse way of coping with the situations mentioned above is to strive for an improvement, With a different perspective about life, people take distinctive responses to what they encounter during their life. Firstly, some people would see their difficulties as valuable lessons they should learn by solving it and making a move. The rewarding would not only a skill or a lesson, but it would be also a step on a higher living standards (in case of financial shortage). Secondly, when people work toil and moil for a better life in general, these people could be considered to be stronger and more resilient towards any difficulties in their life.
In conclusion, on the one hand there are reasons that some people choose to stay the same with their unpleasant situations; on the other hand I believe people should take it as a chance for learning and move forwards.
Please have your comments on the answer below in terms of Lexical Resources and Grammar Accuracy.
Many thanks.
Topic:
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation , such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
The answer:
It is not only in our contemporary society, life has been most of the time believed to be challenging. Some difficulties in life such as being broke or unhappy jobs are sometimes accepted by people; nonetheless, there are also people always seeking for solutions and improvements. For me, I side with the latter idea.
There are some justifications explaining for reasons why people opt to do nothing with their bad situations. One of them is due to their pessimism. Those who always think of the possibilities of failures and barriers would never make a move forwards. In this case, they find no reasons to make efforts to improve their circumstances and forfeit their benefits. Besides that, there are also people have a desire for a change but do not have a problem-solving skills. Consequently, having no clues to do people feel less encouraged or feasible to strive for an improvement. As a result, this type of people choose for doing nothing for their bad events.
On contrast, the reverse way of coping with the situations mentioned above is to strive for an improvement, With a different perspective about life, people take distinctive responses to what they encounter during their life. Firstly, some people would see their difficulties as valuable lessons they should learn by solving it and making a move. The rewarding would not only a skill or a lesson, but it would be also a step on a higher living standards (in case of financial shortage). Secondly, when people work toil and moil for a better life in general, these people could be considered to be stronger and more resilient towards any difficulties in their life.
In conclusion, on the one hand there are reasons that some people choose to stay the same with their unpleasant situations; on the other hand I believe people should take it as a chance for learning and move forwards.
Johnlee94
May 14, 2021
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing task 1 check my passage on real estate [5]
If I were you, I would change a little bit for the introduction like: The figure illustrates the different trends in the the percentages of owning and renting a house throughout the period of 93 years, between 1018 and 2011 in England and Wales.
you could check the meaning of rent as a noun if it is suitable, and two areas should be mentioned in the introduction.
If I were you, I would change a little bit for the introduction like: The figure illustrates the different trends in the the percentages of owning and renting a house throughout the period of 93 years, between 1018 and 2011 in England and Wales.
you could check the meaning of rent as a noun if it is suitable, and two areas should be mentioned in the introduction.
Johnlee94
May 9, 2021
Writing Feedback / Waste is not treated efficiently so the authority should pass laws to promote adequate actions [3]
Hi Karlie, I have some comments for your writing. I find the two most significant things you need to improve in your answer are "task achievement" and "grammar".
Personally, I find the way you express the ideas in the 2nd and 3rd paragraph is not strongly convincing.. even a bit confusing when you prove that laws may affect people behaviors positively by fining or putting them in prison... but the next paragraph you wrote .. better to be awarded not punished. Moreover, the conclusion seems not 100% to be in line with the body paragraphs... (the 2nd paragraph it seems you support the way that laws are impacting positively)/
Second point is grammar, I found lots of grammatical mistakes (e.g put punishments range; who still disobeying; prison sentenced' etc.)
Hope it help.
Hi Karlie, I have some comments for your writing. I find the two most significant things you need to improve in your answer are "task achievement" and "grammar".
Personally, I find the way you express the ideas in the 2nd and 3rd paragraph is not strongly convincing.. even a bit confusing when you prove that laws may affect people behaviors positively by fining or putting them in prison... but the next paragraph you wrote .. better to be awarded not punished. Moreover, the conclusion seems not 100% to be in line with the body paragraphs... (the 2nd paragraph it seems you support the way that laws are impacting positively)/
Second point is grammar, I found lots of grammatical mistakes (e.g put punishments range; who still disobeying; prison sentenced' etc.)
Hope it help.
Johnlee94
Sep 26, 2018
Writing Feedback / The map compares the structure of university sports center at the present and after the innovation [2]
I wrote the below essay under exam conditions, please help give me your comments!. Thanks a lot.
The map compares the structure of university sports center at the present and after the innovation in the future. In general, the center will be expanded and re-built with more rooms and facilities while the central 25m pool remains the same.
To the left of the central pool, the outdoor courts is planned to be replaced by a leisure pool which is connected with a changing room in the south. A sports shop will be also erected on the left of the changing room besides the reception area.
Around the central pool the reception, the changing room and seating one will be unchanged except the gym room will be doubled in size. To the eastern side of seating area, the outdoor courts will be replaced by two dance studios and a sports hall. With a similar arrangment with the western side of the reception, on the eastern size a café shop and a changing room will be also constructed oppositely.
Cambridge 13 - test 4 - writing part 1
I wrote the below essay under exam conditions, please help give me your comments!. Thanks a lot.
The map compares the structure of university sports center at the present and after the innovation in the future. In general, the center will be expanded and re-built with more rooms and facilities while the central 25m pool remains the same.
To the left of the central pool, the outdoor courts is planned to be replaced by a leisure pool which is connected with a changing room in the south. A sports shop will be also erected on the left of the changing room besides the reception area.
Around the central pool the reception, the changing room and seating one will be unchanged except the gym room will be doubled in size. To the eastern side of seating area, the outdoor courts will be replaced by two dance studios and a sports hall. With a similar arrangment with the western side of the reception, on the eastern size a café shop and a changing room will be also constructed oppositely.
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