Posts by Hayu

Hayu

Oct 25, 2018

Scholarship / Cooperation among the networks. Showing my professional networking for essay Chevening [3]

I can see you have a good network but to strengthen your essay it will be good to add an example where you had faced a professional problem, used the network you had and find a solution. The other example could be when your networks faced problem and you help/ provide them a way/ solution. In order not to exceed the word limit you can make paragraph one to the point so that it will be short. I hope this helps.

best of luck

Hayu

Oct 25, 2018

Scholarship / There are several reasons why I choose United Kingdom to pursue my further study [3]

For Study in UK
1. Your first paragraph should introduce about your education background, why you need a further study and what drives you towards it
2. Use separate three paragraphs to explain each of your three choices.When you do so try show how well you know about the modules and other things, also how it is beneficiary for you

For Career Plan
1. Honestly I don't understand the relevance of paragraph 1 and 2
2. Paragraph three is good but try to separate your short and long term plans clearly (with separate paragraphs) and It would be best if start from it

3. On your last paragraph it will nice to add one sentence on what you will contribute to the chevening network

These are my opinions you can see similar essays and comments given by contributors
best of luck

Hayu

Oct 25, 2018

Scholarship / My career with pharmaceutical formulations. Essay about my study plan for Chevening [4]

In my opinion it will be good to put your first three paragraphs in to one short paragraph. When I try to read it, it takes me too long to reach to your study plan which is on the fourth paragraph. So make it a bit focused and short.

You can have one/two sentence about your education background, one sentence for what difficulties you faced (why you need a further study) and one sentences to what drives you to this study.

The remaining three paragraphs are fine.

best of luck

Hayu

Oct 23, 2018

Writing Feedback / Teachers at Fatoni University - writing skills practice [4]

In my opinion,
You have lots of errors regarding spelling and grammar. My advice for you is to test and see the problem using online free grammar and spelling checkers.

Also try not to use word that are not polite like bad, just try to find other words to express this.
If you really want to describe a professor as a student, it will be nice to focus from the teaching learning perspective.

Hayu

Oct 23, 2018

Scholarship / CAREER PLAN IN URBAN PLANNING. CHEVENING. [2]

You are asked to explain your short and long term plans. I am ok with your long term plan but I think your short term plan is actually a long term plan.

In my opinion it will be good to review that plan of yours or go for the detailed plans that can be achieved in a short term.

Best of Luck.

Hayu

Oct 23, 2018

Letters / Informal email to a proposed PhD supervisor [3]

contact with a supervisor regarding PhD scholarship

Hello all, this is my first time when I try to contact the proposed supervisor for my PhD scholarship.
Would you please read it and give your feadback please? Besides I would be pleased if you tell me weather to use it as a letter or just email.

FYI: I will attach a CV which will show about my education achievements, thesis title, publication and work experience.

Dear Professor ---

Since my introduction to the wireless communication I was aware of the bandwidth being one of the scarce resources. And now with having an increased demand and latest technologies with the need of larger bandwidths makes me more interested towards upgrading my knowledge and skills in to do research on the area to contribute to the academic and research discoveries that will lead to the balance of both. That is the main reason for me to concentrate on spectrum utilization efficiency improvement on my masters thesis.

Millimeter-wave spectrum is one of the main underutilized bands which can be make use of the upcoming technologies like 5G. But this mm-wave has its own limitations which needs enhancements to make use of it. One of the solutions is having a good antenna design so that it will be capable of overcoming the loss, attenuation and other factors.

Having this in mind I was looking for a supervisor and lab I could work with to improve my knowledge and skill and contribute for the new findings being solutions for the obstacles in the area of my interest. That is when I came across to your journals about resource allocation, antenna design and 5G mm-wave communication. This leads me for the further investigations of the works done by you and your students and assistances. To my biggest surprise for a person like me who is interested doing a research focusing on a system capable of providing a good communication with efficient resource utilization --- Lab is perfect.

I would be happy to be part of your students to work on the ... (title of project) so that I could not only enhance my knowledge, team and individual research skill on the area but also to I will be a good asset and have my contribution too.

I know PhD is challenging and may face failure but I am capable of facing the challenges and stand up again in facing a failure and carry on to accomplish mine and my teammate goals.

sincerly