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Name: Alexandra Lin
Joined: Dec 6, 2018
Last Post: Dec 6, 2018
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School: Big Sky High School

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alex42   
Dec 6, 2018
Undergraduate / I am the only teenager in my community who thinks something different unlike others. Essay about me. [3]

This essay makes little sense and has no theme. I would suggest scrapping all the details on your friend group and personal life, instead focusing on your impact to the environment.

It's because since grade 12 ... -> Suddenly, in my 12th year of school I became aware of environmental destruction and human overconsumption of natural resources.

This is the only reason ... parties etc.

I would recommend just rewriting the essay and focus on what YOU can do about the environmental degradation you see.
alex42   
Dec 6, 2018
Undergraduate / UPENN Supplement - the vanilla ice cream essay [4]

The permutations and combinations are endless. - not sure if this adds anything to the essay
I really like the essay topics. I have a few concerns
1. Too many ice cream examples, slim it down to 1 per paragraph
2. You refer to Upenn as both Upenn and Penn, chose one and stick to it.
3. You don't show technical writing skills. I would suggest adding in some colons/semi-comma's to show your mastery of english grammar.
4. I would also reccomend talking more about what you can do for Penn and less about what penn can do for you.
alex42   
Dec 6, 2018
Undergraduate / Thermodynamics class - Brown ESSAYS [2]

Open Curriculum at Brown



What do you hope to experience at Brown through the Open Curriculum, and what do you hope to contribute to the Brown community? (250-word limit)

While visiting Brown, I attended a thermodynamics class, not because of a burning desire to understand the Sackur-Tetrode equation, but because I wanted to experience my first STEM lecture taught by a woman. Through relatable analogies and jokes, Professor Palymore made a complex lecture completely understandable; the class felt like a literary analysis of thermochemical cells. Alicia, a Brown sophomore, commented on my Girls Who Code notebook and we discussed unintentional gender bias in STEM classes. She told me about her seemingly strange course load: thermodynamics, traditional Chinese medicine, public health, and a dance class. She didn't need to take those classes to fulfill a requirement-she took them because they interested her. The Open Curriculum meant Alicia didn't have to be an engineer, a dancer, or an aspiring poet - she could be all three. What will I become: an environmentalist punk rock drummer or a mathematical rock climber who dabbles in the theater? I've always reached beyond what was familiar, ending up with busted lips, a fear of pigeons, and an ability to tell which dollar tacos will give you food poisoning. As a member of the Brown community, I will be open about the challenges I have faced, and about the power we all have to overcome seemingly impossible obstacles and use them to our advantage. I will encourage others to look beyond themselves, their comfort zones, and even their own galaxies as they build their foundation for a life of exploration.
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