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nxuanloc

Dec 28, 2018

Writing Feedback / The figure of travelling abroad by Japanese tourists and how many of them are coming to Australia [3]

There are some grammar mistake: I will note for you some of the mistakes

First: 10 million people --> NOT 10 millions
Second: you should add the article "the" before " percentage" in the second paragraph line 1
Third: Paragraph 3 line 1: travelers NOT traveler
And there are some sentences in your writing task that I find it difficult to understand. But your structure is very easy to understand

nxuanloc

Dec 28, 2018

Writing Feedback / IELTS task 1: Describe the trend of three diffrent type of domestic access to modern technology [4]

Thank you a lot. Your feedback is very useful to me. I will try harder the next time.

nxuanloc

Dec 28, 2018

Writing Feedback / Some people claim that financing the costs of health care and education should be government's duty [3]

There are some grammar mistake: supports, ~~the~~ citizens ( in the first time you mentioned it ), in the second paragraph first line, the public

nxuanloc

Dec 24, 2018

Writing Feedback / IELTS task 1: Describe the trend of three diffrent type of domestic access to modern technology [4]

Hello everyone, I am a beginner in studying IETLS, help me fix my writing task 1 and give me some idea to improve. Thank you very much

access to modern technology in UK's homes

The figure illustrates the proportion of domestic access to modern technology by UK residents. In general, all the percentages of access to difference technology increase by the period. Additionally, there was an appearance of internet access in the year 1998/99.

By contrast, the proportion of UK resident using CD player increased significantly from 60% in 1996/97 to over 80% in the year 2002/03 and was also the largest in 4 different types of technology in 2002/03. Similarly, the percentage of using home computer steadily rose from nearly 30% to approximately 55%.

Looking at the graph, there was a dramatic rise in the percentage of people using mobile phone between 1996/97 and 2002/03 from under 20% to 70% and took second place. As the graph shows the number of UK percentage using internet access just appeared until the year 1998/99 at 10% proportion and rose significantly to over 40% in 2002/2003.