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LizLee   
Dec 30, 2018
Writing Feedback / Should governments set a limitation on dangerous sports or not? [3]

IELTS ESSAY: Dangerous sports



Some people think that the government should ban dangerous sports, but others think that people should have freedom to do whatever sport activities they choose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Extreme sports are becoming increasingly popular in the modern society. People hold different opinions toward whether governments should set a limitation on them. Although certain sports activities enjoy a dangerous reputation, I would argue that governments should not stop people from taking part into them.

Supporters of strict rules on extreme sports believe that people and audience may get injury during an extreme sport game. Dangerous sports, unlike mild physical exercise, have a higher level of accident rate. For instance, race car drivers might be injured seriously or even lose their lives when they are driving cars at an extreme high speed. The relics of a crashed car might also hurt the audience. Unless such sports are banned, more people might encounter tragedies.

On the other hand, some people argue that extreme sports lovers should be allowed to conduct the authorities that they are really into. They believe that by taking professional training and paying closer attention to safety measures, it can certainly reduce accident rate. Rock climbers, for example, have been well-trained in the indoor gyms before they set up for a wild climbing journey. In addition, ropes and other climbing equipments will further assure a sound and safe climbing experience.

I believe that extreme sports should not be restricted as it is impossible to avoid people from violating the rules. When someone is going to conduct a skydive at a 30000-mile height off ground, it is not possible for policeman to come and stop this activity on time.

In conclusion, although certain types of sports have a high level of injury rate, governments should not and cannot stop people from enjoying themselves, especially when they have enough preparation.

Looking forward to any advice. Thank you in advance.
LizLee   
Dec 28, 2018
Undergraduate / Meaningful activities (150) - three versions for this short essay to choose from [3]

Hi Anna,

I like all of these essays, but if I have to choose, I would choose C, that's probably because I agree with your point that success comes from every little details. For those most successful business, they must have gained deep understanding of this, so they pay closer attention to customers' experience and other services.

I have some suggestions.

Mottainai!
1. Most of the volunteers were about my grandparents' age.
2. During the war, when a single grain ... --> What war? Could you be more specific?

Chocolate Miracles
1. ... I eagerly call out to passerby ... ---> called out
2. but the Tokyoites walked by hurriedly on.

My first job experience
1. Working at MOS burger ... ---> I believe it would be better if you do not use abbreviation.

BTW, I suggest that you change the sequences of the first 4 sentences in My first job to make it more logical.

Well done!~
Liz
LizLee   
Dec 28, 2018
Undergraduate / Let's take it easy. Despacitus — U-chicago extended essay [3]

Hi Anna,

I am not a native English speaker. So this post is more like a discussion than giving advice.

I enjoy reading your article, which has amusing plots and beautiful imagination.

But I do have some questions.

When I read it for the first time, I felt confucius about those unfamiliar vocabularies, such as Alohomora, Quietus, Finestra, DESPACITUS. In the last paragraphs, you do explain DESPACITUS, but what is the connection of it between other words?

Also, the paragraphs after this sentence "A blaring bleep emitted from my alarm clock pounds me awake." are talking about an event that has past, aren't they? Is it better to use past tense?

Looking forward to your reply.

Cheers,
Liz
LizLee   
Dec 28, 2018
Writing Feedback / FINANCIAL AID VS PRACTICAL AID AND SERVICE [3]

Thank you for your advice. I will avoid using long and complex sentences and pay attention to the conclusion paragraph.

Liz
LizLee   
Dec 28, 2018
Writing Feedback / FINANCIAL AID VS PRACTICAL AID AND SERVICE [3]

financial funding or donating practical products?



Developing countries require international organizations' help. Some people prefer financial aid while others think practical aid and advice are better. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

The matter in which should international organizations provide help to less advantaged areas has aroused discussion. Although financial funding can solve temporary problems, I believe donating practical products and advice can bring more benefits in the long run.

Supporters of financial aid believe that it is helpful to solve the major problems in developing countries. Compared to donating countries, local councils have a deeper insight into the local economy and a better understanding of their current situation. If they are given financial support, they can develop a budget plan that allows them to tackle the most urgent issues.

Those who are approval of other forms of aid and advice believe this can reduce corruption and average people in developing countries can benefit from these supports directly. While financial funding may be corrupted by greedy figures in the governments, donations, such as drugs and medical service, are more likely to be delivered to those who are in urgent need of them, since authorities have access to better products and service and they will have little interest in these donations.

I would argue that providing practical aid and service can motivate these deprived countries to develop independently. Some countries have generated reliance on financial aid from other countries and they take it for granted and lack of motivation to drive economic growth through their efforts. The economy in these countries is so weak that they will soon collapse once there is no financial aid. However, if they were given valuable advice and support on developing their technology and agriculture, it is helpful to reduce their dependence on financial help and break the poverty-related malicious cycle.
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