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Posts by linhnguyen2002 [Suspended]
Name: Nguyễn Nhật Linh
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Last Post: Feb 10, 2019
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linhnguyen2002   
Feb 10, 2019
Writing Feedback / Young Leaders or Old Leaders for better business prosperity? [2]

Leaders and directors in an organisation are normally older people. Some people think younger leader would be better. Do you agree or disagree?

old leaders vs younger workers



There are several obvious points in nominating older workers for high positions in an organisation. However, in such a fast-paced changing society, I believe that youngsters are more appropriate to be leaders or directors.

Young people are both physically and psychologically eligible to be leaders. They are generally more energetic, dynamic and healthier as compared to their older colleagues. Pressure and stress of leadership are believed to be more efficiently addressed by young workers. Thus they have greater strength, which entails greater devotion. More significantly, decisions made by young people are likely to having thriving results. While old leaders prefer defending orientation, their younger counterparts are motivated by taking risks, with meticulous consideration. Thanks to their decisiveness and courage, more and more lucrative projects are carried out and successfully gain substantial revenue for businesses, for example.

Opponents claim that oldsters have irreplaceable strength: experience. Nevertheless, this is no longer convincing when taking rapid obsolescence of knowledge nowadays into account. People in such decisive positions are required to have strong senses of adaptability and open mind. These characteristics are undoubtedly essences of youth and limits of experienced employees. Some people also say that older officers are more likely to get respect than young ones. This opinion is not grounded and biased, since there are various leaders in their thirties or even twenties are honored by the whole organisation.

The writing above has highlighted the flaws in the argument for old leaders, while explain why younger workers should be given chances to experience leadership. Considering today society's competitiveness and changeability, youngsters can work to their full potential and attain inspiring achievements once they are empowered.
linhnguyen2002   
Jan 13, 2019
Undergraduate / "How living in diverse cultures shaped my personality" - UBC Personal Profile Essay [5]

Your writing is very good!!
But I just want to recommend something to be altered:
- Throughout my childhood and teenage early years;
- Because of this -> Therefore
Do you agree with my recommendation?
The rest of this essay really impresses me with your wide range of vocabulary as well as the content.
linhnguyen2002   
Jan 13, 2019
Writing Feedback / Speaking essay about FAMILY - the most important thing of your life [3]

I think you should modify your language a little bit to make it more beautiful. Some words appear too many times in your writing and you have made some grammar mistakes. I have some recommendations:

- ...with a kind eye which through ... -> I think " ... with bright eyes in which I can see the happiness ..." will be better.

- ... his happiness comes from... " but I love the whole sentence to be something like: " ...the reason for this is his job..."

- the most hard-working person
- ... her actions that she took ...-> There is no need for it
- ... is always worried
- ... usually tells jokes
They are just a few to list. But overall you have used a wide range of vocabulary and this is really impressive! Keep trying and practicing then you will make progress!
linhnguyen2002   
Jan 12, 2019
Writing Feedback / PROS AND CONS OF TRAVELLING TO REMOTE NATURAL ENVIRONMENT [5]

Thank you very much for having corrected my mistakes. I practice writing all the time, but I am always confused because I don't know how to improve it and what are the problems of my writing. Your comment helps me a lot.

I just have one more question. Is it right that when the question is "Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?", I should explain what the reasons are and why they are merits/demerits? And when the question is "Discuss advantages and disadvantages of this practice.", I am expected to explain what are pros and cons in my two reasoning paragraphs?
linhnguyen2002   
Jan 10, 2019
Writing Feedback / PROS AND CONS OF TRAVELLING TO REMOTE NATURAL ENVIRONMENT [5]

Topic: It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Wilderness tourism



Wilderness tourism is increasingly popular in recent years, which has sparked a bitter debate over the pros and cons of this brand-new services. Personally, I firmly believe that large-scale travels to remote areas should be considered meticulously before being launched due to their possible detriments

On the one hand, adventure tourism should be encouraged for several reasons. Firstly, journeys to isolated regions are referred as remedies for unquenchable curiosity of human being. Discovering pristine lands empower travellers to push out the horizon of their knowledge and enjoying unforgettable memories with Mother of Nature. Secondly, this kind of tourism is also beneficial from a economic perspective. Being aimed at high-spending visitors, the so-called upper-crust services contribute considerably to the revenue of tourism firms and native countries, as well as creating millions of jobs worldwide. Thirdly, those journeys grant man the opportunities for a sustainable future. There is probably fossil fuel and other valuable resources remained unknow in those locations, waiting to be discovered by the pioneers.

On the other hand, voyages to isolated territories are not without their shortcomings. The ecosystem in those areas are at risk with the burgeon of tourism. Once outsiders flock to these fragile environment, such as Sahara desert or the South Pole, the habitats might be destroyed. This in turn lead to massive loss of endangered species. Furthermore, overexploitation and tourism can result in the demise of traditional customs and heritages of native tribes for the sake of adaption to tourists' lifestyle. Obviously, it is irrational to gamble environmental and cultural stability of these tranquil lands on satisfying a small groups of population.

In conclusion, like two sides of a coin, wilderness expeditions have their own set of merits and demerits. Thus, wary contemplation and approaches must be adopted in order to minimize the hazards exerted by those journeys.
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