Writing Feedback / Effects of technology (impact on users and on different industries). 250 word essay [4]

1. Try to improve the introduction; it seems a little plain.
2. Use a thesaurus for word choice. The word technology is used too many times.
3. Try to use punctuation to combine sentences to improve sentence structure.

Undergraduate / Statement of Intent (Loyola Marymount University Application, Fall 2019) [4]

My opinion.

I feel like this piece is well written but I didn't read anything that would POP out to the reviewer.I feel like the statements you made for your reasons for wanting to attend LMU are very underdeveloped. Nothing is said that makes LMU seem unique, it seems very replaceable in your words. Remember the point of this essay is to show why LMU is the school for you. Character limit could be a big factor in the underdevelopment which is understandable, but do your best to leave no page unturned.

Writing Feedback / Technology in Education Programs is the Future? - IELTS WRITING TASK2 [3]

Your introduction does need to be tweaked a little bit beginning with the omission of '"nowadays". Also, I think the use of pronouns like "i" are reserved for personal narrative essays so please try your best to reduce them.

Undergraduate / "Dynamic word" - My application prompt for UBC: Tell us about who you are. [5]

Going and interviewing your family members, friends, teachers, co-workers, and employers will give you everything you need to properly respond to this prompt because right now what you have written completely misses the concept.