Writing Feedback / Bar chart - the number of activities selected by Australian children in their leisure time [3]

Australian kids and their free-time activities

The bar chart shows the number of actives is selected by Australian children in their leisure time. It gives figures for both boy and girl who aged from 5 to 14 years old. Overall, their activities in free-time tend to be different.

As can be seen from the bar chart, the most popular activities selected in both gender is watching television or videos, it reaches a peak at 100 percent. The second popular activity is electronic and computer game, 80 percent of boys and 60 percent of girls agreed that they are truly keen on this activity. In addition, Boys also prefer some activities such as bike riding, skateboard to art and craft. In fact, the percentage of boys in those activities are always higher roughly 20 than girls. By contrast, fewer boys participate in art and craft about 28 percent compared to approximately 58% of girls.

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Letters / Study Plan for studying abroad but Im not good at writing! Need some help ! [2]

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· My name is A and I was born in a family with strongly experience in gasoline trading. For more than 40 years in petrol business which my parents has descended from grandfather. My parents are very successful in their careers. I am proud of them. I regard them as my role model. I make my resolution to study hard for standing out in the future.

· As a teenager, I spent almost my summer in my grandfather's gas station and kept an eyes on business activities. At that formative age, I learn pretty much about operating business services which urged me to choose business for my career in the future. Therefore, after I graduated from high school, I chose to pursue professional knowledge about business. In 2011, I was enrolled to study at Troy University, with a major in Business Administration (in English). And then in June 2016, I finally graduated from Troy University, the associated Saigon Technology University. I have mainly studied about how to administer a business.

· After 4 years of study in Ho Chi Minh City, I came back to my hometown and worked as an accountant in a gas station which is one of five gas stations in my family chain store. My family company name is XXX Petrol Gasoline Trading Co.Ltd and was founded in 2000, after 16-year we have license to expand our business outside the traditional market, now we can trade goods in most cities in Vietnam such as Dak Lak, Dong Nai, Ho Chi Minh City and all centrally governed cities. I realized that it is more challenging than I had imagined which makes me more attracted to it. One year later, I was promoted for a new position as the store manager and now is head of sale department. Business is a very interesting field where i have a prerogative to apply my strategies on market and have been exposed to various behavioral attitudes of individuals. Nonetheless, I found myself lack of advanced knowledge business which I need to improve weaknesses and enhance the strengths of the family business. After 3 years working,I found that many family businesses still have many weaknesses that inhibit development such as lack of good organization, leadership role and application of technology in management. Moreover, if I am slow in updating administrative knowledge to build the appropriate business strategy to compete with other rivals, the company will have to face to fall behind. I am now ready to complete my missing knowledge to achieve my goal.

· As far as I know that Canada tops the list as the most educated country in the world in CNBC magazine ranking in 2018. After comparison, I finally choose to study abroad in the Canada because of its famous education and safety living place. Another reason for choosing Canada is that students who have studied in Canada are very successful in managing business strategy or setting up a new business. It seem to me that it is a precious chance to combine my experience and academic knowledge in BA degree 4 years for a course in Langara College where I has been accepted to study Business Administration Post-Degree Diploma.

· Upon completion of my post degree diploma, I will come back to my hometown and plan to join in management with a strong educational background. The Vietnamese economy grew fastest rate in the past 11 years and will continue to develop. Therefore, I thinks that this study will help me in making a difference in my professional career and develop the company in a comprehensive direction.

· As demonstrated, I had a passion for business and looking for solutions for the development of my family business during the economic booming in Vietnam. I realize that Canada will give me the opportunity to improve my education and broaden my vision in business.