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Name: Luna
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LUNA94   
Jun 22, 2019
Writing Feedback / IELTS task 1: pie charts about the average percentages of nutrients [3]

Hi,

I personal think that your first and second paragraph can be combined as the first paragraph.

And the second and third paragraph is talking about dinner & lunch and breakfast & snacks respectively.

So that you can add on one more conclusion paragraph about nutritional imbalance as the question also mentioned about.
LUNA94   
Jun 22, 2019
Writing Feedback / Reasons affecting farmland degradation over the world [2]

CAMBRIDGE IELTS 8 TEST1 TASK1



The pie chart describes the causes of land degradation in the world, and he table illustrates the causes of farmland becoming degraded by three different regions.

The main three reasons affects farmland degradation. As much as 35% of degradation is caused by too much animal grazing, approximately 30% of global degradation is due to forest clearance, and over-cultivation of crops account for 28%.

These causes leaded to different regions differently during 1990. Europe was more serious than North America and Oceania, with 23% total land degraded which was almost twice than Oceania (13%). In Europe, the main cause to farmland degradation was by by tree clearance with 9.8%, while the impact of this in Oceania and North America was minimal, with only1.7% and 0.2% respectively. However, over-gazing was the main reason that caused land-degradation in Oceania (which including Australia and New Zealand) account for 11.3%.

Overall, it is clear that Europe suffered the most from land degradation than other regions since its land destroyed that leaded to less productive for agriculture.



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