Writing Feedback / People disagree with a school policy which forces children to learn new language. IELTS2 [5]

NEW LANGUAGES OR NOT?

Topic: Many people disagree with a school policy which forces children to learn new language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The issue whether government should encourage students to learn more and more different languages still remains debatable. Some people claim that learning languages is unnecessary and time-wasted. While skeptics hold the belief that studying new languages is the foundation for the later future. While learning languages brings children lots of benefits, I believe that such a policy should not be made compulsory.

On the one hand, the habit of studying new languages has positive effects on students' school-life. These days, learning language is becoming similiar to humans, which derives from the merging of both oriental and western idea. Therefore, a variety of language curriculums have been given to meet the demands of humans, especially Vietnamese parents' students. The academic managers may find a series of benefits for this phenomenon. With the labour market becoming increasingly competitive, studying new language such as English plays a crucial role on pursuing a sense of job security. Having a international certificate in language, people may find far from difficult to apply for studying abroad with scholarships or have the best job prospects. There are thousands of companies requires a language international qualification, which results in having paid higher salary than people who don't have one.

On the other hand, I would argue that students should not be forced to learn a new language that they don't genuinely need. This is a particularly case for those who don't have the aim to study abroad or work in a international office. It has never been easy for students to get used to learning a new language which they don't see the point of doing it. With students having no hunger for learning a new language, they would soon become bored and distract from their learning purposes. Students should be given the choices for learning new language or not. There is no need to force children do what they don't want to do. A so-called society is the one to respect the young's voices.

All things considered, I strongly believe that new language should not become a compulsory subject. Only by pursuing their favorite subjects, can students form their educational perspective comprehensively.

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Writing Feedback / The urban dwellers tend to live in the nuclear family nowadays [3]

better the large family or not?

Topic: In many countries today, people in cites either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large family groups. Is this positive or negative trend?

The issue whether the urban dwellers tend to live in the nuclear family still remains debatable. Some people hold the belief that living in the extended family is the most effective method to tighten up families' relationship. Other skeptics claim that it has negative impacts on the economy budget. In my point of view, this phenomenon has both positive and negative consequences in equal measure.

On the one hand, there is an increasingly tendency for inhabitants to live in the nuclear family or even live alone. So what is the reason of this issue? There are several advantages of living in small family. From an economic perspective, living in the nuclear family can be seen as the way to save numerous amount of money for the owners. With the labour market becoming increasingly competitive, it is far from easy to find a well-pay occupation, hence saving money plays a crucial role in our daily life. Moreover, the habit of living in large family groups may lead to thousands of problems between the elderly and the young. Normally, the older often keep the negative views about the modern lifestyle of youngster, which results in having misunderstood with each others. For the young, they may have the sense of lacking of the connection with their families' members.

On the other hand, the way of living in large family groups also has a variety of benefits. With people becoming much busier and lacking of care for their children, their parents could take care of their kids instead. Having much time spent on works, people may found it comfortable to concentrate on their works. Equally important, if you lived in the extended family, it would be much better in the household works perspective. There is a need to share housework when people live under the same roof in large family. Some humans struggle to do housework or with who have little or no time at all, living in the extended family would due to the emancipation of housework's burdens.

All things considered, each idea has its own validity. However, how to select one of them is as hard as the chicken and eggs questions. Our mission is to combine one of them to create a comprehensive environment.

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