Writing Feedback / IELTS essay Task 2: Criteria for successful country [2]

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Economic progress is one way to measure the success of one country, while some people think there are other factors. What other factors should be considered? Within these factors, do you think anyone is more important than the others?

health, education and happiness

Definitely, country's development cannot be defined only in terms of economic progress only, there are many other criteria to it; deemed important. Some of them are health, education and happiness to name few, among these, I think happiness is the essential element when it comes to considering a prosperous country.

Along with the economic indicator of development, let's look at other factors which should be noted. One of the criteria is the health of the people, this is measured by life expectancy, mortality and morbidity rates. If the health status of citizens are poor than it means that people have lower standard of living. In order to be considered a better country, its country people needs to have sound health with less risk of diseases or guaranteed health service provision.

Education is another factor that determine the success of country. South Korea, for example, invested heavily on improving their education system where everyone joined schools. Resultantly, it produced highly creative intellectuals that created multinational tech-company Samsumg, worth billions.

Finally, happiness is the most important feature of a high achieving country. In fact, Gross happiness index has already been considered as one of the measure of a prosperous country. To explain it more, when people receive satisfaction from either their achievement or whatever they have in their present leads to less stressful life. This, in turn, makes the society more peaceful without any unnecessary conflicts. Furthermore, state of happiness is the ultimate objective of any social, political or economic motive in life. Thus, no matter how affluent a country could be, if its citizens are not happy then it cannot it be a good country.

In conclusion, health, education and happiness are also important measures in considering successful countries. However, in my personal opinion, happiness is the most vital one as it is the ultimate goal of every development activity, which, when unmet does not fulfill the criteria of developed country.

Writing Feedback / Ecology solution - IELTS essay Task 2: Problem solution essay [3]

high number of rare or endangered species

MANY SPECIES OF ANIMALS AND PLANTS ARE IN DANGER OF BECOMING EXTINCT. WHAT ARE THE CAUSES OF THIS PROBLEM, AND WHAT CAN BE DONE TO PREVENT IT FROM HAPPENING?

It is true that numerous plants and animals are becoming rare or endangered progressively with the pace of human society's growth and development. The disappearance of flora and fauna is alarming which results in imbalanced ecosystem. Once this system is disrupted it leads to disorder in the ecological food chain that effects every living creatures in it. For example, vultures are the scavengers that helps in maintaining hygiene of the wild life by consuming the dead bodies, which, otherwise would be infested by deadly bacteria, further leading to disease in other wild animals possibly.

In order to find some effective solution to this serious issue, identification of the causes is necessary. To point out, there are three main reasons. Firstly, deforestation in the name of settlement expansion or trade of timbers that leads to destruction of animal and plant life. Secondly, trade of animal skin or rare plants that have medicinal value. Lastly, marine activities like over fishing.

Needless to say that extinction of animal or plant species have adverse effect in the ecological order, possible measures needs to be taken to prevent or protect the endangered species. In regards to deforestation, council or state authorities should monitor this and punish if there is any fraudulent involvement of timber business. Considering the illegal trade of animal parts like leather boots, purse, and belts should be strictly prohibited from entering into the fashion industry. Other way of dealing with the issue also could be not using such materials. As far as marine activities are concerned, strict legal fishing limit should be maintained which then should be strictly monitored.

Considering the causes of the problem, if the suggestion possible remedies are implemented than, world can be a better place to live with well-maintained ecology. As a result, this world will be like heaven with presence of varieties of flora and fauna.

Writing Feedback / Waste recycling and law - Argumentative essay [5]

recycling laws to be more strict?

Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement.

To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

Recycling of waste is one of the major act for preserving environment. However, it is also a less emphasized issue which is often argued to be implicated by legal provisions. I partially agree. This essay will discuss how legal instruments can be helpful in encouraging recycling as practice in people.

Undoubtedly, recycling should be a habit of today's society where risks of ecological disasters are high. Yet, people are still lagging behind when it comes to recycling. A recent news about recycling reported only 20% of waste collected from a council in south Australia. It seems people do not care about the issue. In contrast to this, some cities in Canada, have policies of mandatory recycling, where people are encouraged to discard waste in a recycling bin. This policy has been reported to be of grand success making the city greener and cleaner in 5 years. Citizens of that particular city claims to support the policy that has changed their dumping behavior, who also feel more responsible to the future generation. Nevertheless, people can also intimated by fear when laws are involved.

Certainly, fear should not be a reason for people to do anything in this civilized world. Rather government's responsibility should to be aware and educate people about healthy dumping behavior than terrorizing with authority, regardless of the cause. Government can launch local and nationwide campaigns about waste management behaviors. Public service announcements in radios and televisions can be one of the way of relaying the message about garbage management. Stakeholders at every level could be informed and made responsible to further provide support programs about recycling.

In summary, government should provoke it's people for good manners of dumping which are also the need of today's society. Nonetheless, people should not be abided by law to enforce such practice rather educated through awareness programs. Hence i totally disagree that government should use law for recycling.