Writing Feedback / Writing IELTS Part 1: Staff training provided by four companies. [4]

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% of staff trained

The diagram illustrates the percentage of staff training provided from four organizations. Throughout the period from 2003 and 2006, the training staff of company A slightly increased while the others gradually rocketed.

The percentage of company A stayed unchanged from 2003 to 2004 at 27 percent. Throughout the period from 2004 to 2005, the figure of this organisation started to fell sharply and then slightly increased to reach 28 percent in 2006. The percentage of staff training provided by company B rose sharply from 28 percent in 2003 to 31 percent in 2004. During a year from 2004 to 2005, the figure of this organization fell slightly from 31 percent to 25 percent. Similar to the company A, for a year from 2005 to 2006, the number in percentage of company B reach a peak at 34 percent. Between 2003 to 2005, the percentage of company C and D is opposite to each other. While the company C substantially rocketed from 25 percent to 36 percent from 2003 to 2004, the diagram shows the company D reached a low of 17 percent. Between 2005 and 2006, the percentage of staff training from company C fell dramatically from 36 percent to 31 percent. In contrast, it had a doubling in percentage from company D from 17 percent to 34 percent. Both companies' figure increased in the period from 2005 to 2006. Beside the company C has a growth to 36 percent, the other reached a peak at 35 percent.

Overall, the graph highlights the growth in percentage of staff training of four companies A, B, C and D throughout 2003 to 2006.

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Writing Feedback / Working before studying - paper [4]

more to learn than to lose

It is becoming increasingly common for young people to take a job for several years before coming to the university. Although this could have some advantages and also disadvantages, I believe that the convenience is outweigh to the drawbacks.

Working before going to study in a university give the young many advantages. First of all, they will have changes to gain their skills such as time management, communicating confidently with others and handling their money effectively. Also, young people could earn their experience in work. Perhaps, they can use the computer in a professional way or talk naturally with customers. Beside that, young people can build their relationship by their jobs. They could work and meet may people. In the same way, young people could learn how to do the team work and learn experience from other people. Finally, working will give them more money in order to improve their life.

On the other hand, working before going to study in a university has some disadvantages. I think the biggest problem is that the young lack of skills and experience for their jobs while companies or organisations sometime just need the experienced. In addition, young people could take a long time to get used to do with their jobs, which is not really simple.

All in all, young people should be recommended to have jobs for a few years between school and university. Taking up a job can give them more changes to learn than to lose. Therefore, it could help them make their life be better.