Writing Feedback / People act differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree or not? [4]

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Different clothes influence the way people behave

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your answer.

Clothes plays an important role for human life. Without clothes we can not imagine our life actually. To look good we try different clothes in our life. Some people think that they behave differently because of their clothes they wear. In my point of view, I disagree with the statement that People act differently when they wear different clothes. The bases of my views are their personal choice and thinking.

Firstly, they feel good when they wear something they like. People act nicely if they are wearing different clothes. They think they look good to wear something different. For instance, I wore one time short skirt with long jacket. Usually short skirt should go with small shirt. I remember when I wore this to my school I feel special because I thought I am trying new fashion and it's suits me well. She didn't behave differently but she felt good.

Secondly, People wear different clothes are more sensitive towards their clothes they wear because they don't want to make it messy. They act like they care their clothes as they tried something new. For example, my friend was wearing a precious gown in my birthday party. She was caring her dress a lot. We played lots of games that day and we all supposed to sit on the ground she refused to play that game very politely. When I asked her a reason than she told me that she doesn't want wrinkles on her precious new dress. For me she didn't act differently at all but she was extra sensitive towards her clothes. So according to me clothes doesn't influence us to behave differently.

To summarize, I disagree with that clothes influence People to behave differently because it only can change our feeling and thinking. People may feel good and give extra care to their clothes but they won't change in their behavior. So clothes don't impact on any one's behavior.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL - Benefits of learning a foreign language in an early age - for example at the primary school [3]

the young mind is more absorbent

** Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.

Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? **

Learning new things are always helpful for anyone as well as kids. To know many languages are always beneficial for their growing mind. If children will learn foreign language an early language(s) in an early age than then definitely they can do well in their middle school. There are lots of advantages for children to learn foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school, those are related to their academic, career as well as social skills.

Firstly, the most important benefit to learn additional language is academic wise, like if they can learn new things in their early age their mind will be strong. They can learn and remember things fast. Kids in elementary schools always have less burden of study then middle schoolers. So, if they learn new skills early in their schooling age then certainly they could learn and focus on other language later. Learning language early helps to develop their mind as well. Scientifically, it's proven that kids below eight years could learn things very fast.

Moreover, the other important factor for learning foreign language in primary than secondary is related to career. The more you know the languages helps you in your career. Foreign language always give boost in one's career. If you have a knowledge of some foreign language you can write in your resume. So for that reason students should start learning foreign language as early in their school so they can continue to learn more language afterwards.

Additionally, language learning helps to improve children's social skills too. They learn about foreign culture and they know more about them too. It helps them to interact easily with them. Social skills are needed for kids to improve in early age. Otherwise later it would be little tough to develop these skills.

For the same reasons, some experts strongly believe that children should learn foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. For that reason, learning foreign language is compulsory in some elementary schools these days, Initially it was only for secondary.