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Name: Iyanu
Joined: Oct 6, 2019
Last Post: Oct 10, 2019
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School: University Of Ibadan

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Iyanus19   
Oct 10, 2019
Scholarship / Outlining the reason of my future three universities choice - Chevening "Study In UK" Essay [3]

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Hi, wafa mauqifa.
I hope this feedback is helpful.

I would recommend that you check the essay again for subject-verb agreement, lexical structure and the use of punctuation marks generally.

Furthermore, I would advise that you should improve the coherence in the essay which means the connection of ideas within the sentences and paragraphs.

For instance,
Refered to this,With reference to this, I emphasize ... because of mostly ... or foundation most programmes accentuate more on the basics. ... in the UK has have made collaborations with NHS ... which means, that I would ... time with the experts of clinical psychologist professional clinical psychologists. ... my clinical skill practically (tautology)as .......
Iyanus19   
Oct 10, 2019
Letters / Letter of motivation for Msc environmental risk and human security [3]

Hi, Johnsavvy.

Welcome here. I hope this meet you well.

To start with, while your essay have a very good content, I believe you need to improve on its organisation and paragraph development.
Also, I observed that the sentences are too lengthy with a lot of unnecessary words and explanations. I would advise you to try to clearly state your points in shorter sentences. For instance, especially in the crude oil rich zone of the Niger Delta. It would be better to put either "especially in the crude oil rich zone" or "especially in Niger Delta".
Iyanus19   
Oct 6, 2019
Scholarship / Welfare of others - Leadership Skills - Chevening Scholarship [2]

LEADERSHIP WITH PASSION AND COMMITMENT TO OTHERS



The passion and commitment to empower others makes a successful leader. This statement totally reflects my garnered leadership experience over the years. My appointment, election victories and awards are commensurate to my zeal to empower people.

Retrospectively to school days, every session ended with assignments to lead due to my good people management and commitment to others. For instance, I had served severally as class governor and team lead for the first four years in school, thereafter selected as a member of sanitation squad owing to my enthusiasm and organization of my classmates during various environmental sanitation periods. In the final session, I was totally astonished by the triumphant joy from my junior colleagues when I was appointed as the School Prefect. They weren't disappointed throughout my tenure with various engagement in sporting activities and competitions within the vicinity and beyond.

Furthermore, my leadership train continued in the third year in the university when I was appointed as the new editor in the departmental press organization. During my tenure, I introduced a language section in the weekly publication. In this section, foreign language lessons e.g. Spanish and French were published to increase students' horizons which gained popularity in the faculty. In the same session, I was elected as the class governor which lasted for three years without any antagonism. As the class governor, I drove my class to success with great zeal and passion through several tutorial classes, reading cells in different halls, quick response to complaints and inquires, with a significant increase in the Students' grades (85%). Thereafter, I was awarded as the best class governor (first Runnerup) and most distinguished student of the year.

In addition, my work experience was not exempted from a glow of my leadership traits. During my internship in soft drink industry, I led a team of 5 to manage a project of the extension of the engineering room and its store to accommodate the proceeds of the consolidation of two big plants just within three weeks. Therefore, I was commended by the Managing Director for great job done.

Currently, in XXX as a project monitoring officer, I was appointed unconventionally as the buddy to orient and support two new recruits in my division as a result of shown leadership traits and also won in an innovation challenge in the organization, leading a team of 5 members. I was likewise assigned to organize various tutorial classes on programming and data analytics for the group members after work hour for even distribution of skills and key man risk reduction.

To sum it up, it can be said that leadership has been an innate skill I have exhibited over the years. Great leaders can continue to strive in this competitive world only if they are highly driven with passion and zeal to lead and committed to others' welfare.
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