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Name: Khang Du Hoang
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School: University of Economics

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khangdu8897   
Mar 24, 2020
Scholarship / Irish education and Vietnamese students - Master studies [2]

The Essay to apply GOI Scholarship



Essay objective:
1/ Show your long-term interests in Ireland.
2/ How will you promote this scholarship during the time as a Scholar and following my studies as alumni?

Before applying to do Master's studies, I am always persistent and passionate for a diverse learning environment in such a place as Ireland.

I have spent years preparing and searching for countries to pursue my academic careers. After graduation, I would love to put myself in the middle of a new culture and new environment in which I can develop myself both interpersonally and professionally. Ireland is a perfect place as a result of its combination of historical features and modern architecture. Based on my own cultural understanding, Irish people are renowned for their friendliness and hospitality which greatly contributes to overseas student's life in Ireland. I believe this is an opportunity to make long-lasting friendships with Irish people and others from all around the world.

Furthermore, Ireland is the ideal destination which suits my sociocultural and international orientation. My goal after graduation is entering the Marketing industry, as a high-profile Market Research or Digital Marketing Analyst/Specialist, where I can utilise my knowledge and expertise in identifying, developing, and implementing Marketing Behaviour/Consumption solutions. I would like to start my own venture/work in Ireland due to its competitive market force in which I could dedicate myself in the life long learning and profession in the next 5-10 following years.

My aspiration in life is to positively impact people, my peers and the next generations in particular. This is a rewarding, exciting job but challenging due to its long-term commitment. Since April 2019, I have been continually creating and publishing on Facebook about matters related to "life after being graduated" as well as sharing experiences to fulfil college life. This would be the ideal a means of communication to Economics students at first, and to Vietnamese youngsters afterwards. Furthermore, my non-office ambition is to build this community being even larger during my studies in Ireland as a GOI-IES Scholar. Although I have been able to make videos on iMovie thanks to the Japanese Exchange Program last year, I will continue nurturing this ambition by taking Photoshop extra courses to create a more eye-opening experience in Ireland through my posting videos. This will be encouraging more students to pursue their interests, degrees, and careers as well.

Finally, as GOI-IES alumni, I would be a best-fit connector between Irish education and Vietnamese students. In order to advocate Ireland, I will collaborate with International Education Agents in Vietnam to participate in the "Overseas study abroad festivals" as a representative. What I can do best is to share, to advise, and to inspire people with the dreams of studying abroad, especially for those who need financial and mental supports.
khangdu8897   
Mar 24, 2020
Letters / Motivation letter-fellowship Postdoctoral position [4]

Hi Minasafa,

I hope my comments will support your essay.

In the 3rd paragraph, you should mention the experience of working as a team and what you have learned during that time. Although you have shown in your CV, the reader will not understand your values, experiences,.... Instead of listing the courses you have taught, you could try to deepen in how your past experience is relevant to this position. For that, the reader will be able to see the overall picture of yourself. For example:

Having experience in teaching various subjects ....., I am capable of contributing to your fellowship programme by......

Best of luck!
khangdu8897   
Mar 24, 2020
Undergraduate / Statement of purpose AMA+ K'art, Screenwriting [3]

In my view, your essay is too informative, which is difficult for the reviewer to get into your story. My advice is try to use more compound sentences and formal writing language in order to be prompt and professional.

Story-telling is the key to attract the readers. However, your story must be concise and impactful even if it is interesting. The scholarship committees will read a hundred of essays, therefore, resepct your reviewer's time is the key to succeed.

Best of luck!
khangdu8897   
Mar 14, 2020
Graduate / Personal Statement to University of Limerick, Ireland [3]

@Holt
Hi Holt,

Many thanks for your feedback. This statement purpose mainly demonstrates my passions and my background. I also has other 2 letters of recommendation about my academic and professional career.

I'm wondering whether the scholarship/admission committee is interested in my story or just be straightforward to the point.

I've just graduated recently, which means I don't have much experience in this field but ambitions.
khangdu8897   
Mar 12, 2020
Graduate / Personal Statement to University of Limerick, Ireland [3]

Questions:

Please tell us about yourself that supports your application.


(MAX 1000 WORDS)

Dear Committee,

I would like to present my desire to undertake graduate studies at the University of Limerick - Kemmy Business School, which would be a solid step towards my career pursuit.

My background summary
The phenomenal journey towards finding passion and coming out of my comfort zone first started in 2015. Due to a lack of career guidance, I realised that my passion did not lie in being a General Practitioner after the first 6 months at Ho Chi Minh City University of Medicine and Pharmacy. I took the leap to begin a whole new pathway in economics with my own faith and interests. It was disheartening at first until I eventually landed a new journey at Ho Chi Minh City University of Economics.

My college experience was extremely fulfilling even though I had still struggled with unfamiliar forms of assessments in the first years of college. Later on, I managed to improve my performance due to a change in attitudes coupled with new effective studying strategies. I stood out at the School of International Business - Marketing Department in the last two years. With a decent overall GPA of 8.21/10, I attained the honours of receiving 4 scholarships for my outstanding performance in academic excellence.

Besides academic experience, I am more than proud of the values, the growth mindset, and the leadership qualities that will last a lifetime obtained during my out-of-school learning. Thanks to AIESEC, I learned more ways of collaborating with people from different backgrounds, nationalities, and cultures when I got my first-hand experience in global issues and youth development. Attending Global Volunteer in Malaysia has allowed me to enrich my knowledge on food waste management, as well as an understanding of diverse environments. Besides that, I pride myself on my cultural sensitivity when I attended cultural exchange in Japan which made me truly find personal interests to pursue my long-term career.

Career ambition
After 4 years of academic work, active social activities, projects, and research, I believe that Marketing is such a fast-paced field with which I am ready to get involved my whole life. To be a successful young marketer, my goal after graduation is to pursue Master studies where I could build a competitive advantage in multicultural environments. I would like to start studying and working in Ireland for the first 1-2 years in top-leading Marketing firms before returning to Vietnam and dedicating myself to the starved talents here.

My long-term ambition is to be a Brand Manager with strong leadership qualities, academic background, and insightful stories in the next 5-7 years. To achieve that, I realise the opportunity to evolve into high-level education would expand and deepen my knowledge in the field of Management. Meanwhile, I would like to build a young-dynamic community where I could inspire and spread positivity to young Vietnamese. The experiences in Ireland will be a significant milestone to this non-office ambition, which is involved in responsible, challenging actions to create positive social change. Youtube and Facebook would be my chosen platforms for Vietnamese youth engagement, especially of those who are into adult life.

Reasons to choose Master in Ireland
Before applying to do my Master's studies, I have spent years searching for three main aspects of what are well-qualified educational systems, diverse environments, and experiences. As far as I am concerned, Ireland is the ideal destination for those who want to pursue a career path in such a field after graduation.

Firstly, Ireland has ranked the top in terms of education which has certain marketing subjects offered in MSc Digital Marketing/Marketing Consumption and Society by University of Limerick (UL) such as Marketing Leadership, Ethnography for Consumer Research, Digital and Social Media Marketing. Simultaneously, its alumni networks and well-designed taught modules suit the best to my orientation which is promising to opportunities of internships, jobs, and partnership projects.

Secondly, its unique combination of historical features and modern architecture would offer me an eye-opening experience journey. As a sociocultural oriented person, Ireland is the best option which contributes directly to my self-development when I put myself in the middle of a new culture and new environment. In addition, with a good command of English and communication skills, I am confident that I can represent Vietnamese beauty, people, history, and culture to the Irish community. For example, my hometown is in the Mekong Delta which is a vast maze of rivers, swamps, floating markets, and villages. This will be a chance to raise awareness of my coursemates in Ireland and beyond.

Finally, studying in Ireland will be the beginning of an incredible and unforgettable experience that will last for the following years. With my perseverance, academic background, long-term interests and ambition, I am eager to play a part in your programme and the cultural diversity.

I hope with my competencies, experiences, and professional objectives demonstrated above will gain me favourable considerations.

Thank you very much.
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