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Name: Huệ Anh
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May 17, 2020
Writing Feedback / The chart illustrates changes in the figure for electricity generated by three different sources [3]

IELTS 1

the amount of electricity produced from different energy sources



The line chart illustrates changes in the figure for electricity generated by three different sources measured in millions kilowatt hours to supply the city of New York from 1980 to 2000. Overall, petroleum became the main supply energy in the cities, while the figure for natural gas overtook the figure for coal in 1990 and being the second importance sources producing energy over the period of 20 years.

In 1980, petroleum was the most crucial sources generating energy, registered 300 million kilowatt hours. It then decreased erratically, reached a peak of 600 million kw hours in 1985 before falling back to 350 million in 1990. However, the figure for petroleum rose dramatically in the next 10 years, reached a peak of over 700 million kw hours by the end of the period.

On the other hand, coal experienced a gradual rise in 1985, at about 300 million kw hours before decreasing steadily by the end of period, approximately 200 million kw hours. In contrast, the figure for natural gas remained constantly over the first 5 years, it then increased considerably, overtaking coal in 1990 and reaching a peak of over 500 million kw hours in 2000



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pha   
May 17, 2020
Writing Feedback / The issue of communicating using the second language in foreign countries [4]

1. This is an opinion essay so the thesis statement in your introduction should add some words such as [i]Personally, in my opinion[/i],... and also say that you agree or disagree.

2. Whenever you give a reason, beside explaining why u need to give an example to prove your ideal better also your band score
pha   
May 17, 2020
Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1 - The figure for marriages and divorces in the UK over a period of 25 years [3]

the number of marriages and divorces in the UK



The line chart illustrates the figure for marriages and divorces in the UK over a period of 25 years, from 1975 to 2000. Overall, the number of total marriages experienced a gradual increase whereas the number of 1st marriages decreased and the figure for divorces rose.

In 1975, there were about 500 thousands of marriages and continued to increase dramatically in the next 10 years, reached a peak of over 600 thousands of marriages in 1985. Despite a gradual decrease in 1995, the figure rose again at the end of the period, about 570000. By contrast, the numbers of first marriages rose from 330000 marriages to over 400000 from 1975 to 1985 before falling rapidly to just over 300000 in 2000.

It can be easily to be seen that the figure for 2nd marriages was only about 180000 in 1975, it then increased steadily to 250000 by the end of the period. Despite being just about 80000 divorces in 1975, the number experienced an exponential increase to reached a peak of 250000 by 2000, at times overtaking the figures for second marriages.



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