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The issue of communicating using the second language in foreign countries


Khai 1 / -  
May 17, 2020   #1

Life in a foreign language country



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Topic: Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

ANSWER :
Nowadays, the issue of communicating the second language in foreign countries has been receiving a great deal of public attention. Although newcomers may get troubles in the first time in new countries, most people will easily overcome this situation.

There are several reasons why migrants fail to be understood when arriving in new countries. First, since there is a language barrier, the migrants are able to fail to, either speaking or understanding with native speakers. In fact, with a lack of knowledge language, foreigners may be misunderstood or hesitant as talking to local people, which reduces the effectiveness of communication between them. Second, if newcomers have an inability to social interaction, it may cause self-isolation. Plenty of evidence suggests that human beings tend to be isolated when they do not communicate with others for a long time, resulting in a lower standard of their lives.

Nevertheless, civilization and the development of technological devices help newcomers to resolve drastically their problems. First, since globalization helps people easily contact each other by using one language, an international language, such as English, allows people to use as the main language to work or get knowledge more easily and more effectively. In fact, more than 70 percent of the world population is at least to have a working knowledge of English, which helps migrants to have community integration in new lands. Second, by using modern technology like smartphones, people access to knowledge of language effortlessly. This means that with a smartphone was applied to a range of software relating to learning foreign languages, like google translation, learners are easier to look up new words, find essential information and get quick translations, which can reduce significantly their mistakes and misunderstands in conversations.

In conclusion, new migrants may have trouble in using a new language, however, they can completely get over these issues thanks to modern technology and social interaction.

pha 2 / 3 1  
May 17, 2020   #2
1. This is an opinion essay so the thesis statement in your introduction should add some words such as [i]Personally, in my opinion[/i],... and also say that you agree or disagree.

2. Whenever you give a reason, beside explaining why u need to give an example to prove your ideal better also your band score
Le Thuy Vy 1 / 2 1  
May 17, 2020   #3
1. You didn't say whether you agree or disagree with this statement. This absolutely will affect your score because this is an opinion essay.
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"...reasons why migrants fail to be understood ..."
I think you have misunderstood what you need to do. You should have pointed out what challenges (social problems) students have to face more detailed. I think it would be the bets if you can point out 2 ideas, opinions in each passage for example in the first passage (culture shock, language barriers ...)
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May 18, 2020   #4
The essay will most definitely get a score of 1. The overall discussion format is incorrect. There is no extent response, there is no discussion that relates to the defense of your extent response, there is nothing, in the presentation that will tell the examiner that you understood what the discussion topic was, what the discussion requirements are, and what format the response was to be delivered in:

Topic: Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.
Discussion Question: To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?


Your restatement:

Topic: Nowadays, the issue of communicating the second language in foreign countries has been receiving a great deal of public attention. (Although not totally accurate, it is acceptable.)

Discussion Response: Although newcomers may get troubles in the first time in new countries, most people will easily overcome this situation.


The error? The question is, whether or not living in a country where you do not speak the same language will cause problems for you. Your discussion response was about how to overcome the situation. That is totally unrelated to the task instruction. Hence the failing score for your essay.

Your problem is that you dealt with the essay as a problem-solution presentation when it was simply a single opinion extent (yes or no) response. By changing the discussion format, you did not meet the discussion requirements so your increased word count was totally useless. No matter how long your essay is, if you do not have the proper response format, the essay is bound to fail in the actual test.


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