Writing Feedback / (WT2) the effects of genetic engineering on our life. [2]

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Genetic engineering is an important issue in society today. Some people think that it will improve people's lives in many ways. Others feel that it maybe a threat to life on earth.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

People have different views on whether or not genetic engineering is fortifying our life standards. Although it can not totally deny the obvious advantages it bring for our modern lives, i personally believe that there is some existing drawback of its to our planet.

On the one hand, there are plenty of improvements in most of the aspects of our life. In the past, some original products could not own the good properties, in other word, it did not bring high nutrition quality, or good taste and what is more, productivity. For example, there were many destroyed crops due to their weak trait itself- which made them die easily from severe weather, insects or if they did not, the products of the harvest were usually in an extremely low standard. Therefore, thanks to genetic engineering changing the structure of gen, the scientist have brought out a lot of new species which are far better than the original version, they have outstanding features such as productivity, ability to survive under the bad weather.

On the other hand, it should be considered to be underlying intimidation to the life of human-being. The reason for this is that genetic engineering may be taken advantage of for some dark purposes or even some unexpected attributes accidentally created and especially GM products is too expensive for people in developing countries. to illustrate, some research shows that gen engineering outputs can cause allergic reactions for some people, or even toxin from them have been detected in human's blood.

In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for or against the influence of gen engineering, but i believe that besides the plus point of this method to our lives, there are still have some negative effects we need to be careful with.

Writing Feedback / (WT2) Music is the magic instrument [2]

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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is believed that music has a magic function in connecting people to people from all walks of life no matter what nations, generations they are. Personally, i completely agree with this notion and i will give my own reason below.

In the first place, music has ability to help people from all over the world access to new cultures and then have a new knowledge about each countries. This is mainly because, each national music industry has the typical properties such as rhythm, style or in even in some music video, some singers have managed to put their traditional habit and custom or some quintessence of their tradition in it. For example, "nha nhac cung dinh hue" of viet nam was recognised as intangible cultural heritage by UNESCO, it brings itself , the long-lasting features of viet nam from the traditional costume to the music instrument they use to make the rhythm. Hence, when you enjoy a music composition, you also access to a new culture.

In the rest of the phase, music is for everyone from every ages. The reason for this is that, there are a variety of types of music generated in a certain time and by definition it brings the unique features of each periods and each has it own brilliant achievement in accessing to people from all over generations. To illustrate, classical music is the high of music industry in 11th century which was originated from European areas, there are also many all-time distinguished composers, Beethoven, Mozart for example and until now, people still enjoy the masterpieces from hundreds century later. In addition, each kind of music has it own outstanding features which is worth listening and discovering.

In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, i believe that music is the specially useful instrument in gathering people, regardless of their ages or cultures.