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Name: Cynthia Chiang
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Cynthia414   
Nov 18, 2020
Writing Feedback / IELTS 2 - Who should take the responsibility to reduce the environment damage? [3]

Hi,

I assume the topic belongs to discuss both sides and give your own opinion?

This issue is a controversial ... People usually take one side .... People have different views on whether government officers or civilians should take responsibility to alleviate the environmental harm. But in my case From my perspective, I believe that environmental problems need to be tackled from both sides of people.
Cynthia414   
Nov 18, 2020
Writing Feedback / IELTS task 2 - How to evaluate a person? [4]

@Ian0800
The first paragraph should be rephrased from the question. It seems like your first paragraph did not meet the requirement. I am not an expert, but I try to rephrase the introduction for you as follows.

In modern society, the value of individuals is likely to be determined by social symbolism and personal assets. The importance of traditional merits like integrity, generosity, and reliance is fading. In my opinion, I disagree with the view due to a person's worth cannot be measured by external factors like social class roles and properties.
Cynthia414   
Nov 17, 2020
Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: equal opportunities and rights of studying and selecting courses at school [2]

TOPIC:

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.


To what extent do you agree or disagree?


Nowadays, people have equal opportunities and enjoy the rights of studying and selecting courses at school. Although I agree with the view of gender equality, I disagree with the notion that academic institutions receive a balanced number of boy and girl students in each course of study in schools. The reasons will be explained in the following essay.

The main reason why I disagree with the view due to the fact that it is unrealistic. Each subject itself attracts different gender pupils. For example, female students are more interested in literature, while male students are more likely to select engineering as their major at universities. As students have distinct interests, which result in many courses occupying different gender ratios. This means that selecting subject matters is linked to a personal preference.

Furthermore, it against the rights of people receiving education. Educators should not choose students by their genders but by their talent. Otherwise, pupils might be required to study a subject which is not suitable for them. To illustrate, if a female student reaches the score to study mechanical engineering, it would be a mistake to refuse her application due to exceeding the female student numbers in the faculty. An impractical measure would affect universities to select candidates with potential talent, consequently, it also affects students' rights of learning.

In conclusion, despite having equal numbers of male and female students in every course might fulfill the belief of gender equality, both genders have diverse views when it comes to making a choice for their future studies. Thus, I believe it is hard to apply in the real world. (268 words)
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