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The figure of male and females who have studied full time or part time education in three periods


huen 1 / 1  
Nov 18, 2020   #1

provide the summary for the graphs



The figure of male and females who have studied full time or part time education in three periods is indicated.

Overall, most male and female prefer studying full time to studying part time. At the beginning, the number of men who studied part time reached a lowest point in 1970 and 1971.

In 1970 and 1971, about less than 200 thousands male studied part time while there were about 1000 thousands who studied full time. After that, the figure of people studying full time witnessed a slight dip by about 200 thousands to 800 thousands and oscillated between 800 and 900 thousands.

On the other hand, about 700 thousands female studied full time in 1970 and 1971 leap slightly to 800 and reach a peak at 1100 thousands. When the amount of female who studied part time education increased minimally from about 50 to nearly 200 and fluctuated between 200 and 220 in 1990 and 1991. It seem that the amount of female was less than male's at the beginning but higher in final




Cynthia414 1 / 3  
Nov 18, 2020   #2
@huen
1. The figure of for
2. full-time or part-time
3. most male and female ==rephrase: men and women students, adults, British
Holt [Contributor] - / 9,709 3055  
Nov 18, 2020   #3
Your summary overview is non-existent. Your identification of the image provided is not included, the important years of comparison, measurement type, and proper trending statement are all faulty. This essay is not off to a very good start. Your TA score will be in the failing level from the very start. Your TA score will be the basis of your overall score. When you start with a low to failing TA score, you cannot expect to get an overall passing score.

Use the plural form of "thousands" when writing the numerals in word form. When you type out the numerals itself, you should use the singular version of the word presentation. You have used the word improperly in this instance:

About less than 200 thousands = About less than 200 thousand

Your essay contains several GRA problems and LR errors that show how badly you need to familiarize yourself with the basic English grammar rules. Learn the rudiments of sentence writing in English first, then attempt to write only simple sentences. You are stretching to immediately write complex sentences when you are not really capable of writing in that manner just yet.


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