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xl98758

Dec 12, 2020

Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 1: LINE GRAPH; the average number of Vietnamese students study in 3 different country [7]

@Holt
Here's my edit on Body 2, please help me:
The 2005-2015 period witnessed considerable growth in the figure of Vietnamese students in France, Russia, and the US. To be specific, the number of Vietnamese students in the US surpassed that of France and Russia became the country with the highest Vietnamese international, approximately 5 million, compared to 4.5 million in France and 2.5 million in Russia in the same period.

xl98758

Dec 12, 2020

Writing Feedback / The best age to learn a foreign language [4]

Hi. I think you should pay attention to typos:
- "educationalits" to "educationalists", and the word "children" after "firstly, ...."
- You should pay attention to the article
- And 'firstly, children need to study "
@chingo

xl98758

Dec 12, 2020

Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 1: LINE GRAPH; the average number of Vietnamese students study in 3 different country [7]

@Holt
Thank you very much for your advice. I will analyze in more depth

@phuonglinhvuive
Thank you very much for your advance. I will fix it.

xl98758

Dec 11, 2020

Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 1: LINE GRAPH; the average number of Vietnamese students study in 3 different country [7]

@Callipyge
Thank you very much for your advice, I will fix it.
And I'm Vietnamese.

xl98758

Dec 11, 2020

Writing Feedback / [IELTS Writing task 1] BAR CHART: the annual pay for doctors and other workers in seven countries [5]

In my opinion, your post has a few minor grammatical errors:
-In the second sentence of the article you should delete the word and that will become "in the year 2014"
- 'between the amount of money doctors "into" between the number of money doctors "
- And the last one is "the Czech Republic '"

xl98758

Dec 11, 2020

Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 1: LINE GRAPH; the average number of Vietnamese students study in 3 different country [7]

the proportion of Vietnamese learners studying in different countries

Please give me some advice for my essay, thank you very much in advance.
The line graph compares the average figure of Vietnamese international students learning in three different countries from 2000 to 2015.
Overall, the proportion of Vietnamese learners studying in the US and France increased significantly, while a slight drop in students in Russia. Also, the figure for international students in the US is the highest.

In 2000, the number of Vietnamese students studied in France reached a peak, at more than 3,5 million, in comparison to 3 million in Russian and 1,5 million in American. Over the next five years, the proportion of international students in France and Russia declined to around 1 million, whereas going to America rose to more than 2 million.

In 2005, there was a substantial growth stand at 5 million in 2015. By contrast, the number of students increased by 2 million during this period. In the year 2010, the proportion of international learners hit the lowest point under 2 million. On the contrary, It was going up to 2.5 million at the end of the period.

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