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Name: Linh Nguyen Phuong
Joined: May 6, 2021
Last Post: May 10, 2021
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Linh_Nguyen   
May 9, 2021
Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: It is possible to live a normal life as others after releasing from prison [3]

rehabilitated prisoners



Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Answer:
It is common for someone who was sentenced to jail to live a normal life as others after they are released. Therefore, they can provide the best guidance for youngsters about the hidden hazardous of being a criminal. From my perspective, I absolutely agree with this opinion.

There are a number of reasons for ex-prisoners to become good. First of all, they can spend time in jail regretting what they did in the past, which later helps them avoid committing a crime after they return to the outside-jail life. In addition, when being punished in prison, they may receive education and training that make them understand and treasure the core value of life, resulting in more responsibility towards society. Therefore, when returning to the community, with the perception during the prison time, they will do their best to afford a new life like normal citizens.

It goes without saying that the best teachers are the ones teaching from real experience. The more experience is accumulated, the more genuine the lectures about the criminal world become. This is one of the most significant key that can attract students with the lessons. Once the students find themselves interested in the subject of their lecturers, they will come up with questions relating to the criminal stories. Obviously, it is these ex-criminals, not any police or professors, who can reveal the answers to those questions.

In summary, it is completely possible for a man who experienced a life in prison to join the society normally after his punishment is invalid. This man, in return, will become the best teacher to give teenagers advice and warning about the consequences of committing a crime.
Linh_Nguyen   
May 9, 2021
Writing Feedback / The best way to learn is by following the examples set by others. Do you agree or disgree. [3]

- With the length of the essay, I suppose it will be a bit hard for you if you sit a real exam.
- There still exists grammatical mistake: the 4th sentence of the 2nd paragraph.
- This is the written task, so I suggest that you should use a formal writing style and avoid word contractions. E.g.: cannot instead of can't
Linh_Nguyen   
May 9, 2021
Writing Feedback / Water Pollution And the effect [3]

- The task response is not completed properly. You should have a statement to show an obvious opinion.
- The body does not include clear points to strengthen your ideas.
Linh_Nguyen   
May 6, 2021
Writing Feedback / An increasing tendency to stay alone rather than be engaged in any relationship [3]

many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past



In this modern world, there has been an increasing tendency for citizens in a number of countries to stay alone rather than engage themselves in any relationship. From my own perspective, this trend can lead to positive enhancement for both society in general and each individual in particular.

The very initial benefit of this choice is that each person is able to spend more time on developing themselves, leading to more opportunities for successful career. Take a twenty-four-year-old youngster as an example. Instead of spending time on relationship, he may find himself more interested in the work he is doing, which ignites his passion for his job and encourages him to learn as well as to devote himself seriously. This then sharpens his potentials and broadens his knowledge in his desired field. There is no reason for a dedicated and eager individual not to acquire achievement and self-improvement after such hard work. Each excellent person will in turn contribute to a more advanced society.

In addition, people are living in a world where they make decisions independently; therefore, staying alone is more like a choice of life rather than just a marital status. Being alone enables them to have more time for themselves and find their truly inner peace. This also allows a better connection between one's body and soul, leading to a status of healthier mental strength of each individual. Without mental illnesses, it is easier for everyone to perceive their innate value and ability, resulting in higher quality of the labor force for the society.

In conclusion, people are beneficial from a life a being alone as this way of life make positive contributions to self-enhancement and a more developing economy.
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