Undergraduate / Electronic media, drawing, and sculpture; "Who you are/explain your self" [2]

Aite this is my LAST essay :) The topic for this was write about something personal/who you are, so I think I did a good job, just need it to be proofed :)

Thanks!

Eighteen years of my life have been spent on creating who I am today. Within those growing years, I was given the freedom to explore the world, researching my curiosity, and creating my interests. The interests I have come to harness define me as a unique individual and have given me the tools to be successful in life.

Art has been one of my favorite interests and hobby throughout the years. I have explored and created various pieces in electronic media, drawing, and sculpture. With over hundreds of pieces created, and being asked to create media for various events, art has been a big influence in my life. My success in art has as well brought me many awards. Majority of these awards were won through the Parent Teacher association and the Collin County community. Furthermore I have won a gold medal at VASE (annual art competition) four years in a row throughout high school. Expanding my love for art, I joined the National Art Honor Society, a club in which students help create art for the community, and help generate diverse decorations for special occasions hosted at our school. I have been involved in the art community throughout my high school life and it has greatly affected me as an individual by making me a more creative person.

In addition to art, I have developed an immense taste for the computer and online zone. My interest in computers started with the creation of a "Halo" base game on the Continuum/Subspace client. This game was a mass online game which was coded and designed from scratch by me. The game rapidly populated to a small community of about five hundred people. By managing the small population created, over time I learned how to become an effective leader, and how to be efficient in life. Soon, I slowly drifted into the web development zone, in which I learned various computer languages such as C++, Java, HTML and Python. Focusing on the video game industry niche, I gradually created one website, and expanded my community to four and five different websites. Ultimately I ended up with a monumental and successful community, with over hundred thousand unique visits each day. By moderating and communicating with people all throughout the world, these communities refined me as a person and helped me learn organization and task managing that greatly helped me in my academic success.

Furthermore, my interests and success have geared me to the path of my future career. My generation of people have grown up in a time of violence, war, and death. The fact that people around the world die around the world due to the lack of doctors is a scandalous thought, and I would like to be out there to make a difference in someone's life. Countries such as Africa where poverty exists are in a situation in where they can get all the help they can get. Life being wasted by common diseases that can easily be cured is a heartbreaking thought and I want to be out there to save lives that can potentially be saved. However in order for me to become a medical doctor, I would need to peruse a higher degree of education. From the beginning of my admittance to high school, I was part of the Health Occupational Service Association (HOSA), in which all the members and I helped around our metropolis with various tasks such as, going to the nursing home, creating homes for the homeless, and various fundraisers. In addition to that, every Sunday, I would play Bingo with the seniors at the nursing home, and at least once a week volunteer at the Presbyterian Hospital of Allen; in which I helped in the emergency room. The act of helping other people significantly gave me personal satisfaction, and made me feel proud to do what I did, and I would like to continue doing this as a doctor in the future.

I have competed and have been challenged throughout high school and have been involved in many different activities that geared my personal goals to the right direction. Nevertheless, higher education is a prime factor I need to attain before I can make a difference in the world, and I plan to achieve that through hard work and determination.

Writing Feedback / "Person that has made a Diffrence" (2/3) [2]

Hey this is my 2nd out of 3rd essay...so can you guys please review/check this and tell me if it sounds good/make sense? The topic was to write about someone who has made a diffrence in ure life, I didnt want to write the traditional mom and dad, so I decided to go and write about Page and his invention...Google :)

Thanks =)

Sometimes the greatest tools and inventions in our world are often over seen as an integration of life rather than a difficult discovery and an original idea. Larry Page, creator of the popular website Google, has redefined the online world. His ideas and innovative work on the cybernetic world has significantly altered and impacted my life, and changed the overall person I have become or would have become.

Any typical "web-geek" has come to appreciate Google, and Page for his creation which connected the entire World Wide Web on a standard 15 inch monitor. Life without Pages ideas, and abiding features would seem almost too tedious to live, and share information. School work has been probably the most impacted aspect of my life Page has affected me with. He unlocked the lock door which allowed me to see multiple view points of history, or a diverse topic, instead of that being dictated through our teaches, or forced through our text books. It has allowed me to understand more efficiently through various sources, from what I could have not interpreted by a single source. Imaging me without Page and his creation would almost be a devastating thought. I could visualize my self being condemned in my darkened home, forced to be fed information my instructor wished to be taught, and sung a solid view from my book, making everyone and anyone of my generation the exact same as each other, the exact same as the next. However because of him, we are exposed to a plethora of ideas, and allows me to conform to my own individuality, to create my own ideas and thoughts. Page has influenced me greatly by giving my life uniqueness, and a change from other people, as well an opportunity to see a related issues at a magnitude of different angles.

Another way Page has affected me is he has constructed my interests and hobbies. He enabled me to witness what I could never imagine to exist, and made my wildest ideas into another ones reality. Page allowed me to discover my niche, in which I resurrected the largest website of that category; he has allowed me to create wonders in my life, and freedom of restraints from the technology I own. He has placed a pit of what I could have never thought to happen right in front of my eyes and millions of others unlocking me to do as I please and expand and explore my curiosity of this world to the endless limits. Through Google I could virtually read to death on any topic, examine it from infinite angles, and create my own conclusions and theories on it. With the aggregation of mass information which has neatly been sorted by Page's invention and clever thinking, it has allowed me to create my own ideas to share with the world, and my own universal views. It has overall carved me into the person I have become and will further refine me to the person I will become in the future.

Page's ideas and creations have greatly impacted my life. They have redefined my standard of living significantly by presenting me with multiple angles of study on a certain region of a topic. They have helped me connected beyond my current area, and has allowed me to learn about anything from someone else thousands of mile away at a different perspective; allowing me to establish my own theories and views. They have as well taught me a plethora about things I could have never imagined and has allowed me to succeed in them throughout my high school life. Pages constant contribution to the cyber world has totally revolutionized the way the world was once ran. He has strongly influenced my life, and has overall crafted me into a person in which I could have never been without his mind and his tools in life.

Undergraduate / "Important Issue to you" College Entrance essay [2]

Hi guys... these are my college app essays I am doing, and I just need them proof read to make sense,and if its good or not. I really need some help on these and am willing to donate via paypal if I can get good help.

This is the first out of my 3 essays, just posting it here first to see how it goes and if I feel comfrotable I will post the rest.

Well here goes, this first one is about any issue important to me, so I wrote about the stuff below (there is no limit):

Trashing money is not something we would expect anyone to do. Then why do schools in Texas and throughout the United States do this? Recycling is a abused and ignored subject in society today which is burning up our money. Recycling needs to be a important part of a school as it helps preserve the environment and save money.

With the rising costs of various goods today, recycling is an easy solution to alleviate those costs. Take a look at unleaded gas. In Texas today, unleaded gas is hitting and surpassing the three dollar mark per gallon. An average high school in Texas throws away roughly five hundred cans daily. Research shows that recycling one can is saving half a gallon of gasoline (Weyerhauser); hypothetically meaning that one high school can save about two hundred and fifty gallons of gasoline a day. Theoretically, millions of gallons of gasoline could be saved nationwide if every high school in America participated in a recycling program. And all it would take is that schools add green bins in every classroom to collect bottles. Why should oil than be imported from foreign countries if we can utilize the power of recycling and conserve our own oil for a lower price? It would almost seem as if the government would want people to burn up their money. True that recycling might take a bit longer to process and recycle, but it does overall use less resources and money as compared to giant factories and imports. Recycling is a cheaper, and more environmental friendly solution, that helps money and resources.

Plastic bottles such as water, and energy drinks are quickly becoming a popular item in schools today. With society constantly speeding up and getting busier day by day, people simply don't have the time they used to, and resort to substitute methods to save time. Plastic bottles are the symbol of indolence. People today are simply too lazy or busy to go up and grab a quick sip at the water fountain and continue back doing what they were. According to The Container Recycling Institute, one high school on average trashes 3,200 water bottles a day. Aggregating all the high schools in the nation, that would easily shoot pass the million mile stone, and billions within a year. Trashing plastic bottles rather than recycling severely hurts the environment. EPA records that millions of sea creatures die annually because of wasted plastic bottles which are thrown into the oceans and landfills instead of being reused. A simple yet effective solution could be created if schools started recycling, and started to get people into a good habit in doing so early. Investing a short amount of money in recycled bins in classrooms all throughout United States schools would be a short amount of money in placing recycling bins throughout US schools would be a smart investment, as its benefits are vast. True that some schools might have a small recycle bin placed in the corner of the room, far from sight, but how much could that small recycling bin really hold? Not even enough to go through a day without being dumped out before it could be used to recycle. Schools need to implement larger recycling bins in all class rooms and enforce the importance of recycling to students.

More resources are expedited on creating a product from raw materials, as compared to recycled material. The only advantage there is between using raw and recycled material is that raw material takes less time versus recycling. For recycled material, the material has to be recycled so it can be reused again, then it can be used by factories for exporting goods. Thousands of trees are cut down every day just to create paper, and millions of resources are exhausted every day to create every day material that can be easily reused through recycling. Why does the government oversee this important concept, and continue to ignore it? Such a simple method with powerful results being neglected is shocking, and needs more attention and reconsideration in our society today.

However recycling is even frowned upon in some schools such as my current high school. In Allen High School, a group of students and I with a sponsor decided to start a recycling program for our school. We delivered green bins to every class room, and came around every few days to collect the recycled waste. Classrooms would have their giant bins full to the top every time we came around to collect the recycled materials, which resulted in the export of thousands of bottles a day. However after a few months of success the school board came and shut down the recycling organization because there was a complaint that the recycled bottles which piled up near the end of the day made the class room seem sullied and unprofessional. The School Boards seem to be against the promotion of recycling, when thousands of bottles were being exported a day by students, and a school was attempting to make a difference and recycle, the school board shut us down.

Recycling is an ignored and abused subject by many throughout society today. No enforcement or promotion is being advertised by schools, and this is affecting the current and future generations in the long run. Recycling is an effective tool to help preserve our planet, conserve resources and save money that needs to be implemented in high schools throughout the US.