phatpham332
Jul 5, 2021
Writing Feedback / Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local foods is more environment [3]
Your essay clearly shows your carelessness in terms of many typing, grammar and spelling mistakes. I will just fix some of them:
"the determining factors"
"a notable example"
"With the environment's view"
Wrong word choice. It should have been: "From the environmental point of view"
With only these mistakes, I'm sure you'll have a really bad Gr&A score and your overall score will be affected severely.
"Moreover, Respectation and exploration a variety of foods ..."
This sentence really made me confused. Both its grammar and meaning. I agree that there is a link between food and international relationships, but that is in terms of food trading. But food eating? NO. I dont see any connections.
Remember, examiners do not guess. Please always remember to support your unclear points with a clear explanation.
Your essay clearly shows your carelessness in terms of many typing, grammar and spelling mistakes. I will just fix some of them:
"the determining factors"
"a notable example"
"
Wrong word choice. It should have been: "From the environmental point of view"
With only these mistakes, I'm sure you'll have a really bad Gr&A score and your overall score will be affected severely.
"Moreover, Respectation and exploration a variety of foods ..."
This sentence really made me confused. Both its grammar and meaning. I agree that there is a link between food and international relationships, but that is in terms of food trading. But food eating? NO. I dont see any connections.
Remember, examiners do not guess. Please always remember to support your unclear points with a clear explanation.