Wyn
Nov 1, 2009
Undergraduate / 'experience in Venice' - An experience that has changed your life [7]
any critique will help, i wanna send this out asap thanks!
any critique will help, i wanna send this out asap thanks!
Wyn
Nov 1, 2009
Undergraduate / Basketball has become an indispensable part of my life - Common app short essay [7]
It looks good, i think it really gets you personality and that you love the game.
It looks good, i think it really gets you personality and that you love the game.
Wyn
Nov 1, 2009
Undergraduate / My answers for some application profile questions [5]
I like the answers you gave for the last two questions, for the first one i feel that you should stick to either one of those topics and give it alittle more detail
good job
I like the answers you gave for the last two questions, for the first one i feel that you should stick to either one of those topics and give it alittle more detail
good job
Wyn
Oct 29, 2009
Undergraduate / 'experience in Venice' - An experience that has changed your life [7]
Thank you, i just hope its not too desciptive and not reflective enough
Thank you, i just hope its not too desciptive and not reflective enough
Wyn
Oct 29, 2009
Undergraduate / 'experience in Venice' - An experience that has changed your life [7]
My college essay that i'm dieing to submit, I just want it to be perfect.. tell me what you think please!
an experience that changed my life
Once a year the Venetian people dress in the traditional costume that their ancestors once did, and roam the streets of Venice feasting and celebrating. They don exquisite and elaborate masks of human faces, jokers, animals, and various religious symbols like the sun and the moon, along with long gowns and draperies that are adorned with bells and gems. Venice is a uniquely striking city, unlike anything I've ever seen before, with traditions different from any other city. In between rustic houses and buildings run narrow waterways which flow to the Grand Canal. Gondolas and boats float by one another in front of a vast background of ancient churches and magnificent plazas. My experience in Venice was just as amazing as the rest of my trip. The past summer, I traveled in Berlin, Germany; Paris, France; and various cities in Italy, experiencing the best each city had to offer.
For a month I was enveloped in a cultural experience that changed my views on life. Throughout my trip I learned so much about the world I live in, and the people who share it with me. I love to experience new things and visit new places. My trip inspired me to become a worldlier person; it opened my eyes to the beauty, hardship and reality of the outside world. It has influenced me to think on a larger scale about my creativity and the decisions my life is based upon. Berlin is a beautiful city that is ripe with modern and street art, new methods of architecture and advancing technologies; I was amazed at how much progresses the city had done since the time of the Berlin Wall and World War II. I couldn't help compare it to my upcoming challenge, College. Berlin is proof hard work and determination are factors that accomplish anything. I am excited to start my college career because I now have more insight and confidence to face the journey ahead. My time spent soaring through these cities is one of the best memories I hold and factors into so much of my life now. It is reflected in my personality, my art, and my goals. In every city I visited, I saw stunning landscapes and the most detailed and exquisite churches and landmarks. There is such intense beauty in the world; I don't plan to miss an inch of it. Believe me, seeing The Versailles Palace on television is nothing compared to seeing it right before you. I am so lucky to have been able to visit these countries that I had once dreamt about.
The journey experienced taught me so much more than just how to live out of a suitcase, it opened my eyes to the beauty of other countries and their ways of life. There is more to this world then your circle of friends, or the town mall. The world is a vast collection of history, culture, and mystery that I cannot wait to explore later in my life.
My college essay that i'm dieing to submit, I just want it to be perfect.. tell me what you think please!
an experience that changed my life
Once a year the Venetian people dress in the traditional costume that their ancestors once did, and roam the streets of Venice feasting and celebrating. They don exquisite and elaborate masks of human faces, jokers, animals, and various religious symbols like the sun and the moon, along with long gowns and draperies that are adorned with bells and gems. Venice is a uniquely striking city, unlike anything I've ever seen before, with traditions different from any other city. In between rustic houses and buildings run narrow waterways which flow to the Grand Canal. Gondolas and boats float by one another in front of a vast background of ancient churches and magnificent plazas. My experience in Venice was just as amazing as the rest of my trip. The past summer, I traveled in Berlin, Germany; Paris, France; and various cities in Italy, experiencing the best each city had to offer.
For a month I was enveloped in a cultural experience that changed my views on life. Throughout my trip I learned so much about the world I live in, and the people who share it with me. I love to experience new things and visit new places. My trip inspired me to become a worldlier person; it opened my eyes to the beauty, hardship and reality of the outside world. It has influenced me to think on a larger scale about my creativity and the decisions my life is based upon. Berlin is a beautiful city that is ripe with modern and street art, new methods of architecture and advancing technologies; I was amazed at how much progresses the city had done since the time of the Berlin Wall and World War II. I couldn't help compare it to my upcoming challenge, College. Berlin is proof hard work and determination are factors that accomplish anything. I am excited to start my college career because I now have more insight and confidence to face the journey ahead. My time spent soaring through these cities is one of the best memories I hold and factors into so much of my life now. It is reflected in my personality, my art, and my goals. In every city I visited, I saw stunning landscapes and the most detailed and exquisite churches and landmarks. There is such intense beauty in the world; I don't plan to miss an inch of it. Believe me, seeing The Versailles Palace on television is nothing compared to seeing it right before you. I am so lucky to have been able to visit these countries that I had once dreamt about.
The journey experienced taught me so much more than just how to live out of a suitcase, it opened my eyes to the beauty of other countries and their ways of life. There is more to this world then your circle of friends, or the town mall. The world is a vast collection of history, culture, and mystery that I cannot wait to explore later in my life.