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Name: irvan1212
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irvan   
Nov 21, 2021
Writing Feedback / Employers should give longer vacations to employees ( writing task 2) [2]

Employees need more leisure time from work



Holidays are something that many workers look forward to. In fact, I agree that that longer holiday should be provided for workers.

Firstly, the first reason why letting workers to have more day off for holiday is a great decision is because it can help them to enhance their work performance later on. That is to say, if they have more time for themselves, they will get vacation to relieve stress after a hustle and bustle work that they have. For instance, workers in Facebook, multinational-company, in Singapura are more likely to have great and good decision when they have to deal with insurmountable marketing and operational problems in their company after taking 3-4 more days for holiday into account. Thus, the fact that taking more day offs for employees proves that the importance of holidays can not be overlooked in order to have employees with magnificent performance.

The second argument in favor of giving the workers more vacation is because it can lead workers to have more time with their family which can increase their creativity in work environment. In other words, if they have a supportive and helpful family who stands by their side during difficulties, they feel loved and fulfilment, and this will make an impact on improving their creativity ideas which produce brilliant performances in their work life. For example, workers in marketing department in Vietnam have a tendency to produce magnificent performance in terms of great advertisement idea when they are allowed to have more day off for vacation. Because having more vacation and creativity are closely intertwined, it is much better for company to lead them having day off to give them more time for their family.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that although workers should be responsible for their heavy workload, I would argue that letting them to take more holiday can be more beneficial to them in order to relax themselves before posing with another work at a later situation.
irvan   
Nov 21, 2021
Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 1 - BAR CHART ABOUT DIVORCE RATES IN FINLAND AND SWEDEN FROM 2011 TO 2015 [3]

The bar chart

hi Huy Vo, lemme help you to repharase introduction

... in Finland and Sweden, a period of 5 years, between 2011 and 2015. Units are measured in percentage.

Overall,it can be clearly seen that the figure for Finland witnessed ..., while that for Sweden saw ... the given period. Both two ... fluctuations.
irvan   
Nov 14, 2021
Writing Feedback / The number of telephone calls minutes in Finland in three different categories (period of 9 years) [3]

writing task 1 - telephone calls in finland



The given bar graph illustrates the number of minutes telephone calls in Finland in three different categories, over a period of 9 years, between 1995 and 2004. Units are measured in minutes in millions

Overall, it can clearly be seen that all categories increased gradually throughout the given period, with the exception of the figure for local landline, which decreased over the second half. As a result, although the number of minutes in local landline remained the highest from start to finish, the gap for all figures was narrower at the end.

In terms of the call category with the highest level of usage at the beginning, the number of minutes for local landline stood at precisely 12,000 minutes in 1995. The number then witnessed a gradual increase and reached a peak of just over 16,000 minutes in 2001, before declining steadily to its original level in the final year.

Regarding the other two less usage of telephone calls at the start, the figures for national and international- landline and mobiles started at precisely 6000 and just over 50 minutes, respectively. The number for the former experienced a stable increase and peaked at just above 10,000 in 2004. Similarly, the number of calls for mobiles grew gradually to roughly 3,000 in the following 5 years, after which it peaked at nearly 10,000 in the eventual period.