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Posts by Vanan
Name: Vân An
Joined: Mar 13, 2022
Last Post: Apr 10, 2022
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From: Viet Nam
School: High School for the Gifted

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Vanan   
Apr 10, 2022
Writing Feedback / IELTS writing task 2: Some universities offer online courses. Is this positive or negative? [2]

online courses as an alternative to campus classes



It is true that online courses are predominant in many universities compared to offline classes offered on campus. Although there are some drawbacks to this matter, I would argue that the benefits outshine its drawbacks.

The main disadvantage of the trend towards online learning would be the difficulty of direct interaction with lecturers. Students may not have the opportunities to discuss about the matter which they do not fully understand with their peers as well as their lecturers. Therefore, the quality of teaching and studying will not reach its best and students may fail to attain high scores in their exams. Another reason is not all students come from a wealthy family. They may not have a technological device to attend a corresponding course, therefore, they have to quit their courses and wait for the campus to offer the offline courses.

Despite the negatives mentioned above, I believe the benefits of attend online classes in universities outweigh that of the drawbacks. Firstly, when you study online you can manage your time more easily, as your timetable is flexible and you can arrange your time to study in every possible way. Secondly, online courses can help people from four corners of the world to apply for the courses that they like, despite of their nationality. age, race and ability. For example, during the COVID 19 pandemic many renowned universities in America offer online courses for all students over the world. It is the opportunity for students who is gifted and diligent but can not afford to leap at their dreams. Finally, the cost of some online courses offered by universities are often cheaper than that of the offline courses. That will be a great help to those who are facing some financial issues in their life.

In conclusion, there are certainly some disadvantages of studying online in universities, however, I would argue that it is a positive development overall.



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Vanan   
Apr 10, 2022
Writing Feedback / Compulsory study. Young people should be forced to stay in full-time education until they are 18. [3]

I think "knowledge" is an uncountable noun so you should use "is" instead of "are in that sentence. Another thing is in this sentence: "... for students to devote their time on high school.", I suppose you should you "dedicate their time on" instead of "devote" because "devote" is used when you want to show your love to someone or something that you set your heart on.

I hope this helps you.
Vanan   
Apr 10, 2022
Writing Feedback / Many people suggest that instead of celebrities the media should focus on the public interest [4]

"The life of ordinary people will be improved ..." I think instead of this sentence you should write " The lives of many people will be better if the media focuses more on them".

Also, there are many grammatical errors in your essay and you should try to use a wide range of vocabulary and learn how to use relative clauses in order to make your essay sound better.
Vanan   
Mar 29, 2022
Writing Feedback / Internet users as percentage of population. Summarise the information and Write at least 150 words. [2]

Internet users as percentage of population



The line graph compares the number of internet users in three countries: USA, Canada and Mexico from 1999 to 2009.
It is clear that, the figure for the number of people who used internet in three countries all increased throughout the years with Canada witnessed the highest rise in the number of internet users.

In 1999, USA had the highest percentage of internet users with around 20% meanwhile both Canada and Mexico only had 20% and 10% respectively. In 2005, the figure for both USA and Canada users of internet rose dramatically to approximately 70%. Whereas, Mexico saw a steady grow from 10% in 1999 to around 25% in 2005.

By 2009, Canada experienced an upsurge in the number of internet users to nearly 100%, exceeding its counterpart - USA, while Internet users in USA witnessed a gradual growth to about 75% and Mexico to nearly 40%.



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