rubinguyen
Apr 24, 2023
Writing Feedback / [IELTS Task2] More and more plastic waste is polluting the world's city, countryside and ocean. [3]
In my opinion, you have a wide range of vocabulary and use some effective sequencing adverbs ( firstly, secondly, etc.) However, I see that you need to utilize other cohesive devices such as by doing so, therefore, hence and so on in lieu of repeating " this " to refer to the previous words/ sentences so many times in the essay. That is my point.
In my opinion, you have a wide range of vocabulary and use some effective sequencing adverbs ( firstly, secondly, etc.) However, I see that you need to utilize other cohesive devices such as by doing so, therefore, hence and so on in lieu of repeating " this " to refer to the previous words/ sentences so many times in the essay. That is my point.