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JaeL   
Dec 9, 2009
Undergraduate / Racism, UT essay B - issue of importance [5]

Okay, I TOTALLY CHANGED my topic and essay to gang violence. let me know what you think please. all kind of criticism and corrections are HIGHLY welcomed.

Through my early years of life, I grew up in a lower class town with high gang activity. Wherever I went there would be gang members, all wearing the same clothes, leaning against a wall either guarding their territory, gambling, or dealing drugs. I used to walk to school during my elementary and middle school years, and I was often confronted by many of these so called "gangsters." I used to have so much fear for these people because I was scared of what they would possibly do to me. It was as if gangs had taken over not only my neighborhood but my soul.

Elementary school and Jr. High were the toughest times for me. I grew up in a military town, Killeen/Ft. Hood, TX, where the majority of the population were blacks. During my trips, walking to and from school, I encountered much trouble and was often bullied by the neighborhood "gangsters." "Hey kid, want some pot?" I was once asked on my way to school by a creepy man who always wore blue. He had tattoos covered all over his body, wore baggy clothes and a blue bandana, and was always followed by an entourage of about 4 or 5 other guys who all wore the same clothes. Of course I refused because I was taught to say no to strangers, but just the fact of knowing that I was asked to buy drugs in the 3rd grade makes chills run down my spine, even to this day. I have witnessed innocent people get "jumped," drive-by-shootings and even an old woman being robbed. Stuff like this you would expect to see in movies, but I witnessed it in real life and experienced it as well.

A hand-full of kids at school were associated in gangs too. They would bring drugs and weapons to school, bullying kids, always cursing worse than a pirate, and never followed teacher's instructions or rules. I used to get bullied in class by these so called "thugs." I would often tell the teacher what was going on and she would say, "Don't worry. I'll take care of everything." But I would never see her at least even warn those kids who tormented me. Sometimes I could see the terror on teacher's faces. It was almost as if the school staff was too afraid to do anything. I was utterly dumbfounded on how the school did nothing to prevent bullying or gang violence so I began to take matters into my own hands, and that did not work out so well. Standing up for myself only caused me more harm. Consequently, I was jumped for even trying to hold my own ground.

When the school teachers did nothing, I felt like there was no hope. And when I got beat up for standing up for my rights, I knew there was nothing else I could do. I became paranoid whenever I walked outside my house. I would stroll down the sidewalks and every 5 seconds, check if there was anyone behind me. The outside past the walls of my home became a war zone to me, and playing outside was no longer an option. I began to expect my fate. Having my lunch money stolen would become a daily routine. I would beg my parents to drive me to and from school, and they became so annoyed. During those years of my life I became a social outcast. Living as a hermit, I associated with no one at school because I believed everyone was harmful and that no one would help me.

Despite all the chaos, my parents decided to move away from the "ghetto" neighborhood I grew up in because of better income. We ended up moving to Harker Heights, which is a newer town right next to the previous city I moved from. Although the neighborhood I moved to was not completely gang free, there was a lot less gang activity than my old neighborhood had. However, the area we moved to was still apart of the highly concentrated gang area. Driving around town, you could still see buildings that were tagged by gangs every other block.

Just recently, a murder of a high school student across town had occurred. The cause of the student's murder was due to gang violence. If I did not move, I would have had to attend the high school that that student was murdered at. And who knows, I could have been the one that lost his life due to gang violence.
JaeL   
Dec 5, 2009
Undergraduate / Racism, UT essay B - issue of importance [5]

Please let me know what you think of my essay, if it answers the prompt, if there are any mistakes, and how I can make it better. Thanks in advance!

Choose an issue of importance to you-the issue could be personal, school related, local, political, or international in scope-and write an essay in which you explain the significance of that issue to yourself, your family, your community, or your generation.

We see all sorts of problems in our society today, but one of the world's major issues has always been racism. Racism is a dear cause of hardships for many minority people living in America and elsewhere, and a lot of people are oblivious to the fact that it still exists. People even create racist organizations, which target the group of their apathy to detest their sinful acts. Many lives are lost due to murder resulting from racism every year. Tragic events such as 9/11, African enslavement, and even the holocaust were all effects due to racism.

Defined as an act of true hate to another whom does not share the same ethnic features as yourself, racism can even bring someone to the point of murder. We've learned about the holocaust and enslavements, but why can't we learn through past history that those tragic events were a conclusion from racism? Racism starts from a simple notice of different physical features and appearances of a person.

The infamous Ku Klux Klan is an example of failure to learn from past historical mistakes. Even though all issues between White and Blacks were "resolved," the KKK detests the rights of African Americans still to this day. The Klan believes in none other than all white superiority. They run around wearing white sheets and chanting racial slurs against African Americans, Mexican Americans, and other races. The Nazi party, which we know were the main antagonist of the holocaust and murder of millions of Jews, is another racist organization which was created under the leadership of Adolf Hitler.

More recently, on September 11, 2001, New York's World Trade Centers were attacked by two hijacked planes. Taking thousands of lives, the American planes were hijacked by Middle Eastern terrorist organizations. On this day Americans of all age, sex, and race were united as one. However, as the years pass, the hatred that a lot of Americans felt towards Middle Easterners would not have been disagreed. The innocent Muslims and Arabs all over the country were feared, spit at, and even bantered. Racism seemed to once again continue.

People must understand that racism still exists to this day, that innocent people lose their lives because another person does not accept differences. As long as people walk this earth, racism will always be present. There will constantly be racist organizations, tragic events, and history to look back upon. However, until people realize the animosity and hatred towards one another racism will only become worse.
JaeL   
Nov 15, 2009
Undergraduate / First generation student - Common App/ Topic of your choice [4]

Write out words like "do not" and "are not" in your first and second sentences.

A little bit of assistance could be all the help in the world to jump start their lives back on track.

I can relate to your essay because that's how most of my early childhood was like growing up. lol.
Anyway, Please read my essay and help me out. THanks.
JaeL   
Nov 12, 2009
Undergraduate / UT essay - person of impact on you and importance of that person [9]

Hi. This is my first post on here. I will admit that I am a horrible writer and english was never my subject. Everything from my grammar, vocabulary, and even down to my sentence structure is terrible. I would really appreciate any and all the help and suggestions i could get.

The prompt is 'tell us about someone who has made an impact on your life and explain how and why this person is important to you.'

The one person who can change your view and attitude towards life influences what you do in the future and what you make of it. That one person for me is my sister. She has taught me not only to love life itself, but to love, thank and cherish those who gave me life and an opportunity on this Earth. We share half of the same blood, have never lived under the same roof, and are fourteen years apart. However, she inspires me in every possible way -- whether it is believing that I can get into college and become successful to fulfilling simple everyday responsibilities such as taking care of myself and those who I care about the most.

Both my sister and I are first generation American citizens. I was conceived when she was only fourteen years of age back in 1992, but at that time she was living with her mother, who is of Mexican heritage, and I was living with our Korean father and my Korean mother, who are married. English was not our first language. In fact, my first language was Korean and hers was Spanish. I grew up with many hardships being a minority as did she. As a young child I could never comprehend anything more than eating, breathing, sleeping and going to school. The only understanding I could process were life's necessities and the difficulties that was brought alongside it. However, under certain circumstances, I envisioned the true meaning of life with the help of my sister.

Before I started Pre-K at the age of four, I had been exposed to little of what was American culture. I was almost completely isolated to the Korean lifestyle that was conscious within the house I lived in. By the time I entered the dark unknowns of elementary school I was confused and unaware of what my surroundings were. I can remember asking myself at one point in time, "How did I end up in this alien world?" I was different than everyone else. I was always picked on. I was hated. It was almost impossible for me to fit in with children at school, and this in turn made me question my parents as to why I had to be different. I blamed my parents for the longest time and held the deepest grudge on them. At times I asked my parents why couldn't they have just stayed in their home town and give birth to me there, where I belong? What broke this foolishness to hold a grudge on the people who gave me life was a loss of life itself.

It was the first funeral I had ever been to, and it was my sister's mother who had passed away. I will admit that I was a bit afraid, and I remember it as if it were yesterday. All week long, from the viewing to the mourning and burial, her mother's death had taken a toll on her. She loved her mother more than anything, and she had lost her. Some time after the funeral, I had talked to my sister over the phone and our father was brought up into the conversation. I remember her saying, "You and Dad are the only one's I have left." This made me think to myself, "What if I lose all those who I could have, would have, or should have shown my love to?" As I thought of these feelings it was almost as if my eyes were open for the first time.

I realized that my parents were not the one's to blame but rather the one's to thank and cherish. With the help of my sister I could finally think deeper and understand why my parents brought me to this alien land that was so unfamiliar. They wanted a better life for me and I couldn't hold a grudge against them for that. That one single event dealing with my sister had impacted my life greatly. I envision receiving a great education, something that would have been impossible to receive back in Korea, and making my parents proud of me. I had gained the meaning to life, the meaning of death, and the meaning of love. My sister is the one who will always keep a life changing impact on heart.

This is all I have wrote so far. Is it okay so far or should i change it? Please any help would be appreciated.

Thanks,
Jae
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