Posts by Lyth

Lyth

Feb 14, 2024

Student Talk / Reading : 9.0 - Just got my IELTS result. [19]

Congrats! It's amazing that you got 9.0 in reading. And your writing band is great too, hope you can share some tips for us :)

Lyth

Jan 13, 2024

Writing Feedback / IELTS what do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community? [3]

Your introduction is irrelevant to the topic - you are supposed to paraphase the topic in your own words, not to cue any unrelated statements. Avoid using "Nowadays" and "All in all", since they are not formal and unprofessional. Your theses are poorly supported and not convincing enough. There are many grammar and spelling mistakes, so make sure you proofread your essay next time. Never use abbreviation like "can't" or "etc" in a academic writing test.

Lyth

Jan 13, 2024

Writing Feedback / [IELTS Writing task 2] Countries are becoming more and more similar [3]

I think your ideas are a little seperated. Instead of listing different reasons, try to elaborate on only one or two main reasons each paragraph, give it a full explanation and example if possible - the more detailed, the better it is. Don't be too dependent on cohesive devices, it may make your essay seem to be incoherent than you thought. Also, you may well include your theses in the conclusion to sum up your main ideas, for example: "In conclusion, although being capable of buying similar products anywhere in the world has several advantages, there are various troubles arising from this including counterfeit practices and product breakage during delivery.

Hope this will help.

Lyth

Jan 12, 2024

Writing Feedback / Task 2: There are many reasons that can motivate a person to stay working for the same company. [2]

There are many reasons that can motivate a person to stay working for the same company.
Some believe that money is the main reason. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

It is supposed that money is the chief factor that encourages an individual to keep working for the same company. While I understand the logic behind this suggestion, I still firmly disagree with it for several reasons.

Those who believe that payment is the main motivation for working may have several arguments. They may well argue that it is the element which is important to one's needs. From my perspective, it is undeniable that money plays a vital role in every aspect of life, from daily expenses to long-term financial goals, such as homeownership, education and retirement planning. Without a good salary, individuals may have trouble making ends meet, especially when the cost of living has been rising more and more. Another possible argument is that financial incentives are compelling factors to employees, which could enhance job satisfaction and alleviate financial stress. Such tangible rewards not only recognize an employee's value but also provide them with a sense of stability.

Nevertheless, I still oppose this view for some reasons. Chief among these is that job satisfaction can extend beyond monetary rewards. Factors such as a positive work environment, opportunities for personal growth, work-life balance, and especially passion for the job are considerably more influential. These contribute to an ideal workplace that fosters a sense of belonging and job satisfaction, making employees more likely to stay. Another point worth mentioning is the relationships that individuals build within the company can also be a potent motivator that keeps one to continue devoting to the same firm. Employees may choose to remain with that company because of the friendships they have formed or people for whom they have an affection.

In conclusion, it is understandable that payment is an essential element regarding one's motivation to stay working for the same company. However, I cannot support such a view since many other reasons keep individuals motivated, including job satisfaction and good workplace.