applesandtea
Dec 29, 2009
Undergraduate / Williams supplement - A Trivial Conversation [5]
dramacratic - Whoa! I guess in the midst of my editing, I somehow forgot the "be" :P How embarassing!
Actually, about the last part...I was having trouble with it. I don't really like it because as you pointed out, it's cliche. I'm going to have a good look at it tomorrow because I wrote that after writing 2837592 other responses so I'm a bit drained haha :P
Oh, thanks for pointing out that "Excitement" part! Now that I read over it, it really does not flow well at all :( Fixing it won't be too arduous of a task though. (Well, I hope)
The reason why she didn't know I was Japanese was because it was the first day I really spent with my host family (technically, it's the second, but the first day was basically minimal talking + everyone was tired = unpack, shower, eat, sleep) and I only spoke in English before. :) I should probably clarify the beginning part to clear up confusion.
I'll read yours tomorrow...I mean, later today because it's currently 2:53 AM, my time :P
Thank you so, so much for the suggestions!
cucciola21 - I agree on the cliche and the lacking comment. I feel the same way haha. I'm really glad you liked it though! Well, I was actually having trouble with the "looking out a window" prompt so I was reading over the responses other people had and quite a few of them didn't mention a window at all! I'm hoping that they'll infer it's a sort of window-to-the-past thing, but if not, I'll just add in something about that (although hopefully not as corny sounding) tomorrow. Thank you so much :)!
dramacratic - Whoa! I guess in the midst of my editing, I somehow forgot the "be" :P How embarassing!
Actually, about the last part...I was having trouble with it. I don't really like it because as you pointed out, it's cliche. I'm going to have a good look at it tomorrow because I wrote that after writing 2837592 other responses so I'm a bit drained haha :P
Oh, thanks for pointing out that "Excitement" part! Now that I read over it, it really does not flow well at all :( Fixing it won't be too arduous of a task though. (Well, I hope)
The reason why she didn't know I was Japanese was because it was the first day I really spent with my host family (technically, it's the second, but the first day was basically minimal talking + everyone was tired = unpack, shower, eat, sleep) and I only spoke in English before. :) I should probably clarify the beginning part to clear up confusion.
I'll read yours tomorrow...I mean, later today because it's currently 2:53 AM, my time :P
Thank you so, so much for the suggestions!
cucciola21 - I agree on the cliche and the lacking comment. I feel the same way haha. I'm really glad you liked it though! Well, I was actually having trouble with the "looking out a window" prompt so I was reading over the responses other people had and quite a few of them didn't mention a window at all! I'm hoping that they'll infer it's a sort of window-to-the-past thing, but if not, I'll just add in something about that (although hopefully not as corny sounding) tomorrow. Thank you so much :)!