Undergraduate / "going to enojoy my ups" - UPENN supplimentary. [17]

I know its very late. But I just couldn't think of anything at all. All the above writings seem so good. I dont think i am eligible. Seems like im going off my topic so much... is this okay? or should I just talk about that one certain community? ( which by the way is STWing)and write some about that and cut out all the side talks that I wrote?

Benjamin Franklin established the Union Fire Company, the Library Company of Philadelphia, the American Philosophical Society, Pennsylvania Hospital, and, of course, the charity school that evolved into the University of Pennsylvania. As they served the larger community of Philadelphia, each institution in turn formed its own community.

Which of the academic communities and social communities that now comprise the University of Pennsylvania is most interesting to you and how will you contribute to them and to the larger Penn community?

I first learned about University of Pennsylvania through my brother who has always been my mentor and a role model. He was an alumnus, a rather good one, graduating in the top of his class. He would often take me downtown and show me the school and its vast campus. He would babble nonstop of how remarkable the school was and what it could do for me.

What first caught my attention weren't any prestigious programs or majors UPENN offered; it was Penn's value on hands-on activities rather than long boring lectures off the book. Holding 165 research centers and institutes, and over 3800 faculty and 5400 assistants, Penn's great dedication towards research facility is what makes UPenn so unique and attractive to science students worldwide just like me. Becoming a doctor was my childhood dream. UPenn is an ideal place for me to continue working towards my dream; Hospitals on campus, eligibility for graduate classes and graduate level research for undergraduates and its exquisite facilities created one of most renowned environments for student's to pursue the science of medicine. I too desire to experience this overwhelming opportunity in pursuing a degree in medicine.

Finding the right school has been hard for me due to my diverse interests. During my years of high school, I grew an affinity towards Engineering and technology through a unique program called SPARC. SPARC stands for Space Research Center. Students in this project come together to build and operate a simulation of the Space Shuttle, requiring different groups in robotics, medical, engineering, computer science, flight planning, publicity and secretarial work. SPARC is a student run project, but supported by even NASA itself. Each group undergoes hands-on training of the field, which is both fun and educational at the same time. When I heard about the Science and Technology Wing at UPENN, I immediately knew it was the program for me (It immediately SPARC'ed my interest, no pun intended). Similarly to SPARC, STWing is a large community based project. Whether it may be building go karts or blimps or just working on computers, its desires to use a given student's knowledge and abilities to accomplish amazing and, more importantly, really entertaining things draws me towards a career at UPENN. Also, through STWing's dinner discussions with prominent researchers and faculty, I would like to share my experiences and knowledge and bring fresh perspective to the STWing community and eventually the Penn community.

UPenn, located in the city of Philadelphia, is a gathering place of the world. Penn's excellent academic and social programs attract people from all over the world, including me. Meeting diverse people sounds very interesting, and it will definitely provide me with a global perspective. Through my brother, I have seen the outcomes of privileged study at UPENN, I hope to follow in his footsteps and become a Upenn graduate. Once accepted, not only will I contribute fresh perspective to the community, and serve the community through diligent innovations, but continue my study in pre-med to become a doctor to help others. So pick me to be your student, and you won't regret your choice.

Not finished yet. ... just wanted to know if the idea is a good choice of writing.
PS, not in paragraph form. and sorry about my childish writings T--T