Undergraduate / 'Charles Schwab conference' - common app short answer ace mentor program [4]

Sitting in the huge conference room in the Charles Schwab building, students are working hard on creating a high school college campus. Seven students are working diligently on the architecture of the different rooms of high school campus. Another five students, including myself, are working on the engineering aspects such as the buildings placement on the lamented map of the area and the electrical and mechanical units of the buildings. While the other two remaining students working on the PowerPoint presentation that will convey the point of our project in front of the ACE Mentorship Program. Working with different professional engineers and architects, arguing certain points of the project with my fellow teenage engineers, using engineer rulers, exact scales and process of eminent domain, for seven months made me feel like actual engineer. By encountering obstacles such as putting sports fields near the subway line and rerouting the bus that overlapped the construction area made me feel like I'm a mechanical engineer working for the Port Authority, in charge of creating a massive project for the benefit of Bushwick community.

Undergraduate / 'truth, civility and righteousness' - Lehigh supplement equity and community [4]

In our ever-changing society, people have defined 'equity' and 'community' in many different ways. How do you define these terms and what are the implications of equity and community for our 21st century society?

Equity brings the truth, civility and righteous to a tightly knit community, a group of people that interact with each other in a common area and who have common interests and goals. Without the equity, the community is loosely scattered thus developing contrasting ideas, which in return leads to the downfall of the community. Similarly communities are not as strong as they have been in the past. Hunters and gatherers work together in every aspect of life, such as hunting, house chores, caring of elders and children. They face failures and success together and no matter how hard the task, they are a joint community of people who stand next to each other through tough times. But at the end of the day, they share a great amount of equity with each other which in return makes them a tightly knit community. But as mankind has evolved into the 21st century, it is our human nature to be greedy and selfish, and we try to get ahead of everyone by leaving the community behind. If accepted into the Lehigh community, I will not only stay loyal to this community but try my best to bring more equity to this tightly knit community.

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