Zeinab1383
May 26, 2010
Graduate / "International MSc in Entrepreneurship Education & Training" application letter [7]
Thank you very much kevin
Thank you very much kevin
Zeinab1383
May 26, 2010
Undergraduate / Only by undergoing the trials and challenges of human affairs. [4]
littlegirl88
The girls in my class or in this schoolarewere rich,...
littlegirl88
The girls in my class or in this school
Zeinab1383
May 26, 2010
Essays / Classification of TV programs [6]
anubis
Hi!
do you think News is boring? I don't! you can also add TV series.
anubis
Hi!
do you think News is boring? I don't! you can also add TV series.
Zeinab1383
May 26, 2010
Graduate / "International MSc in Entrepreneurship Education & Training" application letter [7]
Hi!
Thanks EF_Kevin. It is final draft of my essay on:" Briefly describe what you expect from the IMEET Programme." which I sent it again as a new thread. Would you kindly revise it again?
Hi!
Thanks EF_Kevin. It is final draft of my essay on:" Briefly describe what you expect from the IMEET Programme." which I sent it again as a new thread. Would you kindly revise it again?
Zeinab1383
May 26, 2010
Scholarship / Ambition to become an oustanding commodity trader (Postgraduate Economics program) [11]
Hi!
Your entire essay is about your memories and experiences. You wrote:"I always keep in mind the importance of my contributions to surround communities." better to explain why contribution to communities is important.
"My spirit to work for the good of my communitycontinuescontinuedwhen I returned after graduation."
Hi!
Your entire essay is about your memories and experiences. You wrote:"I always keep in mind the importance of my contributions to surround communities." better to explain why contribution to communities is important.
"My spirit to work for the good of my community
Zeinab1383
May 25, 2010
Essays / Living at home and living away from home [15]
babyevy
Dear
I know that I am not good at English grammar so I can't edit your essay. But I can give you some feedback about your essay.
You wrote "they do not realize that living at home has more benefits compared to living away from home." it's kind of offense to people who choose living away from home and I think it's better you do not decide which kind of living style is better than other because it depends on the personality and needs of people. I think it's better to compare two kind of living style without making any choice.
So you can write about how living at home with family members has a significant role on improvement of qualities such as respecting other people ideas and choices, teamwork skills and so on.
babyevy
Dear
I know that I am not good at English grammar so I can't edit your essay. But I can give you some feedback about your essay.
You wrote "they do not realize that living at home has more benefits compared to living away from home." it's kind of offense to people who choose living away from home and I think it's better you do not decide which kind of living style is better than other because it depends on the personality and needs of people. I think it's better to compare two kind of living style without making any choice.
So you can write about how living at home with family members has a significant role on improvement of qualities such as respecting other people ideas and choices, teamwork skills and so on.
Zeinab1383
May 25, 2010
Graduate / "International MSc in Entrepreneurship Education & Training" application letter [7]
Hi, I made some changes on my essay. Would you review it again?
Briefly describe what you expect from the IMEET Programme.
Iran's high inflation and unemployment rates, lack of knowledge beside my interest for entrepreneurship, creativity and innovation motivated me to apply for IMEET programme; so I expect the programme give me a new and wide perspective on the concepts and role of creativity, innovation and enterprising behavior.
I also expect the IMEET integrate practical experiences with theoretical studies, allowing me to apply my knowledge in actual work.
I know it is hard for many people to imagine themselves as entrepreneurs and be responsible for their own income, especially when they have no experience in doing so; I hope IMEET will expand my skills within entrepreneurship teaching and learning facilitation so I can make an efficient and effective contribution to create a new innovative learning culture.
Moreover, I expect IMEET pedagogical methods enable me to choose effective mode of teaching, appropriate language and responds for any situation as well as increase my Understanding of the audience's requirements and key concerns.
Hi, I made some changes on my essay. Would you review it again?
Briefly describe what you expect from the IMEET Programme.
Iran's high inflation and unemployment rates, lack of knowledge beside my interest for entrepreneurship, creativity and innovation motivated me to apply for IMEET programme; so I expect the programme give me a new and wide perspective on the concepts and role of creativity, innovation and enterprising behavior.
I also expect the IMEET integrate practical experiences with theoretical studies, allowing me to apply my knowledge in actual work.
I know it is hard for many people to imagine themselves as entrepreneurs and be responsible for their own income, especially when they have no experience in doing so; I hope IMEET will expand my skills within entrepreneurship teaching and learning facilitation so I can make an efficient and effective contribution to create a new innovative learning culture.
Moreover, I expect IMEET pedagogical methods enable me to choose effective mode of teaching, appropriate language and responds for any situation as well as increase my Understanding of the audience's requirements and key concerns.
Zeinab1383
May 24, 2010
Graduate / "International MSc in Entrepreneurship Education & Training" application letter [7]
Dear,
I am going to apply for International Master in Entrepreneurship Education and Training (IMEET) programme. I have not too much time because my deadline is close and I would be grateful if you could have a corrective look at my essay and give me a feedback.
The vision of IMEET is to develop and run a unique international learning space targeting learning facilitators in entrepreneurship such as advisors, coaches, consultants, trainers and teachers.
I am sorry for any obvious mistake :D
...
Briefly describe what you expect from the IMEET Programme.
Iran's high inflation and unemployment rate, lack of academic knowledge beside my interest for entrepreneurship, creativity and innovation concepts motivated me to apply for IMEET programme; therefore I look forward that IMEET programme complement and sharpen my academic and practical knowledge on the mentioned arenas to master in the facilitation of entrepreneurship learning and consulting arena.
We live in a changing world, so knowledge of standard situations and the routine ways of dealing them is not sufficient and new ideas are needed to design our way in to the future. I have also recognized that critical thinking is excellent but it is not enough and we need generative, productive and creative thinking so I expect IMEET teach me "what can be" instead of "what is"; And I wish to learn how to instruct constructive thinking.
I know this is hard for many people to imagine themselves as entrepreneurs and be responsible for their own income, especially when they have no experience in doing so; consequently I wish IMEET programme equip me with pedagogical tools for appraising entrepreneurship ideas and business plans and also strengthen my knowledge on situated learning theories as well as innovative methodologies to build an entrepreneurship culture.
I trust the world class learning environment of ASB IMEET programme give me the opportunity to interact with and learn from best professors and participants with different cultures and backgrounds to become skilled at the field of entrepreneurship arena.
I desire the programme focus on different theoretical descriptions of the entrepreneurship process, the phases involved and the process of organizing the entrepreneurial venture.
By doing field work of IMEET in an international environment, I hope to be equipped with methodological ability to carry out practical studies of entrepreneurship learning facilitation to build
I hope team based assignments of IMEET also develop my communication and team work ability.
Finally I hope by attending IMEET can give back to my community.
Dear,
I am going to apply for International Master in Entrepreneurship Education and Training (IMEET) programme. I have not too much time because my deadline is close and I would be grateful if you could have a corrective look at my essay and give me a feedback.
The vision of IMEET is to develop and run a unique international learning space targeting learning facilitators in entrepreneurship such as advisors, coaches, consultants, trainers and teachers.
I am sorry for any obvious mistake :D
...
Briefly describe what you expect from the IMEET Programme.
Iran's high inflation and unemployment rate, lack of academic knowledge beside my interest for entrepreneurship, creativity and innovation concepts motivated me to apply for IMEET programme; therefore I look forward that IMEET programme complement and sharpen my academic and practical knowledge on the mentioned arenas to master in the facilitation of entrepreneurship learning and consulting arena.
We live in a changing world, so knowledge of standard situations and the routine ways of dealing them is not sufficient and new ideas are needed to design our way in to the future. I have also recognized that critical thinking is excellent but it is not enough and we need generative, productive and creative thinking so I expect IMEET teach me "what can be" instead of "what is"; And I wish to learn how to instruct constructive thinking.
I know this is hard for many people to imagine themselves as entrepreneurs and be responsible for their own income, especially when they have no experience in doing so; consequently I wish IMEET programme equip me with pedagogical tools for appraising entrepreneurship ideas and business plans and also strengthen my knowledge on situated learning theories as well as innovative methodologies to build an entrepreneurship culture.
I trust the world class learning environment of ASB IMEET programme give me the opportunity to interact with and learn from best professors and participants with different cultures and backgrounds to become skilled at the field of entrepreneurship arena.
I desire the programme focus on different theoretical descriptions of the entrepreneurship process, the phases involved and the process of organizing the entrepreneurial venture.
By doing field work of IMEET in an international environment, I hope to be equipped with methodological ability to carry out practical studies of entrepreneurship learning facilitation to build
I hope team based assignments of IMEET also develop my communication and team work ability.
Finally I hope by attending IMEET can give back to my community.
