Undergraduate / 'living in residence halls' WHY BINGHAMTON WHY DO I WANT TO BE ADMITTED? [4]

Through my whole life, I have been a strong, confident and open-minded person that knows what she wants and how to reach this goal. As an only child in my family, I feel the responsibility to take care of my parents when I grow up, that is why I am strongly concerned about my education and future career. My sister is now living in Prague and my family decided that it would be better if I lived with her during my freshman year, that is why I am in University of New York in Prague. I have chosen a school that has accreditation and is based on American standards because I knew that I would try to transfer to the school I always wanted to attend ï Binghamton University.

At high school I have been always a successful student in all the subjects I attended, however, I preferred math courses like algebra and geometry, as I felt more confident with numbers. In my senior year of high school, I knew I had to be well educated in finance in order to succeed in Business and support my parents. I found out that Binghamton University is one of the best schools that provide excellent affordable education with a unique library and intelligent professors. I would very much like to be taught by notable and honored academic teachers because I think that they will give me the valuable experience and knowledge and I will try my best to succeed in all courses.

I can see myself living in residence halls, the real ones, to feel the student atmosphere. I have always dreamed about the real student life, which includes dormitories, communities, special occasions and organizations that leads students together. My current university does not provide those opportunities; I feel that I need them to be the part of my life. When I first saw how universities in the US are organized I was captivated by the air of student community that was there: organized labs with a lot of people working together, a variety of sources in the libraries, overwhelmed and entertaining life in dorms and a lot of communities inside of just one university. This can really help students to find their own way during those four years at college. When I look at the pictures, videos and read students' blogs, I can feel myself as a part of this student life myself and I cannot wait to try being one of them. Moreover, I find the site of the university very convenient, the fact that it is situated outside of the city is a significant advantage because it forces to concentrate on studies and your college friends, whereas, in my current university, which is in the center of the city, students meet each other only at classes and this may be one of the reasons why there are no communities.

I have chosen Binghamton University because I think this school is the best place to pursue my higher education. I am very much interested in attending the School of Management which is the best for me because it gives an excellent knowledge and opportunities to get an internship and to build my future career. I would also like to become a part of prestigious Alpha Kappa Phi organization because I have heard and read about it a lot. The idea of grouping all people related to business education, realization is incredible, and I think that being surrounded by smart and interesting members is great especially the chance to train and obtain the knowledge, skills and experience that will definitely help me developing and preparing for the future. I know myself and if I am interested in business then I would do my best to get as much information and knowledge as possible and try to find friends and colleagues for the rest of my life, I feel strongly that Binghamton University is the best place to realize all my dreams.

Undergraduate / Transfer admission essay, why do i want to attend this school of management? [5]

Hello guys, i want to transfer to another university so badly. please, i will appreciate very much your comments about my essay. this is only my first draft :)

thanks in advance to you all!

To Whom It May Concern,
At high school I have been always a successful student in all the subjects I attended, however, I myself made I preference to a mathematic courses of algebra and geometry, as I felt more confident with numbers. In my senior year of high school, I knew that I need to be very well finance educated and that I want to succeed in business to support my parents. I found out that X University is one of the best schools that provide excellent affordable education.

I can see myself living in residence halls, the real ones, to feel the student atmosphere. I have always dreamed about the real student life, which includes dormitories, communities, special occasions and organizations that leads students together. My current university does not provide those opportunities; I feel that I need them to be the part of my life. When I first saw how universities in the US are organized I was captivated by the air of student community that was there: organized labs with a lot of people working together, a variety of sources in the libraries, overwhelmed and entertaining life in dorms and a lot of communities inside of just one university. This can really help students to find their own way during those 4 years at college. When I look at the pictures, videos and read students' blogs, I can feel myself as a part of this student life myself and I cannot wait to try being one of them. Moreover, I find the site of the university very convenient, the fact that it is situated outside of the city is a significant advantage because it forces to concentrate on studies and your college friends, whether in my current university, which is in the center of the city, students meet each other only at classes and this may be one of the reasons why there are no communities.

I have chosen X University because I think this school is the best place to pursue my higher education. I have monitored a lot and am very much interested in attending the School of Management which is the best for me because it gives an excellent knowledge and opportunities to get an internship and to build my future career. I would also like to become a part of Alpha Kappa Phi organization cause I have heard and read about it a lot.

btw i forgot to include that the reason why i did not apply to this university on my freshman year is because my parents wanted me to live with my sister for a while. that is why i applied to UNYP, but the real me wants to go to this school where i am applying now.

well this is pretty much it for now, please be honest! i appreciate any comments ! thanks