Writing Feedback / Parents are the best teachers?--Toefl essay [4]

Do you think begin with a sentence is good?
I doubt that.

Writing Feedback / GRE-The arts reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society. [7]


can be described


the word vague does not make sense here
vague mean something not clearly understood or expressed. Do you want to express this meaning?

A very fluent essay!^_^

Graduate / Admission for Phd in Epidemiology [10]


I think you need a conjunction between these two

Writing Feedback / Friends, knowledge, purpose: people attend college for many different reasons [5]

Maybe you use too much "I think" in your essay.

Faq, Help / Help to understand one of the rules (You get what you give!) [11]

I have the same question with Yisheng.
Thanks for Kevin giving this answer.
I will try to help others and give my feedback, although I found it difficult to correct the grammers in the native speaker's essay.

If posting my thought does help the author, I can make it.

Writing Feedback / "to have three years of studying a foreign language" - my toefl essay ! [4]

I taught （was taught/ learned） basic things about Arabic and English language when I was in high school. In that time, it was very hard for me and other students to learn two foreign languages, but now I am very thankful that my high school made us to learn. Learning foreign languages is a skill(a skillful task) that not only it is very useful for our future college/university study and job but also is a way to learn about other people and cultures in the world.

You make some small grammar mistakes.
Just keep on practice.

Undergraduate / Volunteering @ Baptist Medical experience that will affect your college experience [5]

Volunteering at Baptist Medical has been one of the most enriching experiences I've faced in life. From the Heart Hospital to the Joint Center, I've truly learned that theres mor to life than one's self.

Four summers ago, i was a mere high school freshman eagerly working as an assistant to the Physical therapist in the Joint Center. Helping with workouts and assisting the patoents didn't appear to be of much importance, but little did i realize was that i was making a difference. Albiet i wasn't being paid for he work i did, i made a conscious effort in being committed to all that i was assigned and it truly paid off. The physical therapist, doctors, and nurses were always appreciative to the hard work that i gav and how much it made their days run more smoothly. Not only did volunteering at Baptist provide me with an oppertunity to explore the vast areas of the medical field, it also gae me that total access to a hands on experience.

This previos summer, i was privileged to work on the Heart Hospital on the 3rd floor. Boy was it tremendously exciting! I was able to shadow the RN's in all they did and assist with charts, vitals, etc.

There are a lot of spelling mistakes in your essay.