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"the doctor announced that I was pregnant" - Courageous action [5]
I think this is written very clearly and to the point, good job :) I am fairly new at revising, so I don't know that I am right in the corrections I have made, but I hope this helps
I was shocked when the doctor announced that I was pregnant.
I didn't expect a pregnancy at this time, when my relationship had ended a month ago.Being that my relationship had ended a month earlier, I was not expecting a pregnancy.My boyfriend didn't know that I was pregnant because we hadn't planned it. For the first time in my life, I had to face a difficult situation that required a courageous action. I was a college student whose school expenses depended on financial aid and family support.
I was afraidMy main concern was that I wouldn't be able to take care of my baby.
I come from an immigrant family and was the only child who could attend college. I was always told that finishing college was my first priority.
Strongly believing in educationBeing that my parents are strong believers in education, ,
my parents they sacrificed a great deal to see that I was provided with
a quality education. However, if I told them
what was happening to meof my pregnancy , I was afraid that they would be disappointed and wouldn't be
able forgive me.
ThoughRegardless , I decided to keep my baby and
confidedconfide into my parents.
Although I don't remember exactly how our conversation went on that day, I was aware that it was an extremely uneasy moment for me. It was hard for my parents to accept the truth. They were astounded and frustrated. They suggested that I
should have an abortion and
continuedcontinue my education; otherwise, they wouldn't support me with my finance
s .
I knew that being a single mother was not an easy task, especially
, I hadconsidering the fact that I would have to deal with my own finance
s . Eventually, I had to search for a full-time job
.I looked everywhere, from
anthe Internet to
athe newspaper. Luckily, I
had found a full-time job and obtained
heathhealth insurance
which covered
for my baby and
myselfme . But most importantly, I was
actually interested in the job I was doing. I worked as a maternity care assistant at the OB doctor's office, and I decided to continue my education in the medical field.
I was surprised to discover that I had so much energy, which allowed me to work
at the daytimeduring the day and go to school
during nighttimeat night .
Maybe it was because ofI believe it was the anticipation of becoming a mother that made me so
much strongerstrong . I have come to realize that life doesn't go as smoothly as we expect sometimes. Yet, at low point in our lives, and under difficult circumstances, we need to respond with courageous action