theTalkingRice
Jan 6, 2011
Undergraduate / "a positive gut-feeling" - Why Notre Dame? (TOO LONG) [2]
The only thing I would actually advise you to change is the first sentence. It kind of makes it seem that you're talking down on Notre Dame, even though you're saying that your friends and acquaintances were the ones who "grimaced" at ND while you disregarded their opinions. It could be taken as a little rude, depending on how angry your admissions officer is normally :P
Everything else is pretty good imo. You're over the word limit, so if you can find anything that you think you could get rid of, you should probably do it, but if you love everything, leave it because I don't think any college would actually reject you for being like 100 words over. Although I'm in the same boat as you, never applied to college before, so maybe I'm wrong :p
The only thing I would actually advise you to change is the first sentence. It kind of makes it seem that you're talking down on Notre Dame, even though you're saying that your friends and acquaintances were the ones who "grimaced" at ND while you disregarded their opinions. It could be taken as a little rude, depending on how angry your admissions officer is normally :P
Everything else is pretty good imo. You're over the word limit, so if you can find anything that you think you could get rid of, you should probably do it, but if you love everything, leave it because I don't think any college would actually reject you for being like 100 words over. Although I'm in the same boat as you, never applied to college before, so maybe I'm wrong :p