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labroy   
Oct 27, 2010
Writing Feedback / IELTS: The increasing business and culture contact between countries. [6]

To begin with, the economic activities between countries increased enormously through the process of globalisation.

This can also improved the local economies in these developing countries.

For example, wW orker safety and environmental issues such as pollution, as an illustration, are sometimes ignored, which can lead to that can cause serious problemslikesuch as high fatality rates in the areas.
labroy   
Oct 27, 2010
Writing Feedback / Should people never be satisfied with what they have? Jane Austine's pride [3]

There are several reasons that can support my view.

Take Mary, my older sister, for example.

So after graduating from Beingjing University, she was determineddecided to stay in Beingjing, the capital of China, in order to meet new challenges,and to findfinding more workingjob opportunities. Through her endeavor, she found a position in NOKIA, and was ablt to liveliving an intriguing life as other metropolitan residents. Recently, Mary is now planning to go abroad for further study.
labroy   
Oct 22, 2010
Writing Feedback / TOEFL; Judging a person is not an easy task because the human nature is so complicated [4]

Please give me a feedback;

QUESTION; Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One should never judge a person by external appearances. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

The impression given by one's physical appearance may be vastly different to that person's actual character. While some people deliberately hide their real character and show an entirely different personality to the world, others may unknowingly present themselves different to their real personality. Therefore, judging a person by his or her external appearance can be very misleading, irrational and sometimes be unfair by that person.

To begin with, the external appearance does not reveal one's exact character and personality although it may sometimes provide a vague idea about them. Therefore judging a person by his external appearance may be very misleading and sometimes very dangerous too. For example, there was a person in my neighborhood who had been involved with underworld operations, but none of the neighbors suspected him because he appeared in the neighborhood as a very decent and peaceful person. However, he finally got caught to the police and then only the entire neighborhood became aware of his real character.

In addition, it is irrational to judge a person by his external appearance because such a judgment is not only hasty but also based purely on assumptions that can be far from reality. Instead, a rational judgment on a person should be based on his or her qualities, attitudes, values, capabilities etc., and therefore requires a thorough understanding of this person. For example, an employee who has a very smart appearance may not be as smart as he looks in his work. Therefore, a rational judgment on a person would require more time and would be based on real facts of this person's character.

Moreover, we often make unfair conclusions about other people by judging them by their external appearances. In many instances these judgments have proved to be invalid and baseless. For example, my brother is an extremely quiet person and he smiles very rarely. Although it is his nature and not an intentional behavior, people usually get the impression that he is either very unfriendly or high-minded and tend to keep a distance from him. But those who understand him well appreciate his qualities and value their relationship with him. However, he often becomes a victim of his external appearance and his introvert characteristics, which he cannot help.

Finally, judging a person is not an easy task because the human nature is so complicated. Therefore such judgments should be made very carefully and they require a better understanding of the person's character. Judging a person by his or her external appearance is a hasty action that lacks substantial evidence of this person's character and therefore it could be very misleading and irrational. Moreover, such a judgment can also be very unfair by that person.
labroy   
Oct 9, 2010
Writing Feedback / Exploiting tourism is more lucrative than ever to nations galore; some concerns [4]

It is obvious that tourism brings to a nation many benefits to a nations .

FirstlyFirst, owing to tourism industry, lots of new jobs have been created.
I would suggest;
First, tourism industry creates many job opportunities.


Indeed,the living standards of those, who live and work in travelling the areas where tourism is popular,has been would inevitably improved inevitably since the appearance of new high-paid carrers as tour guide or souvenir seller. with the creation of new carrers such as tour guides, souvenier sellers.
labroy   
Oct 9, 2010
Writing Feedback / Do you agree or disagree:The advertising is the main cause of unhealthy eating habits [5]

Nowadays,With the rapid development of TV and the mass media. ,Mm ore and more firms (I would suggest "many firms") take advertising as a main source to introduce their products and attract the potential customers to buy their products.Especially for some food firms,their advertising areis usually very incentive for people (this idea is not very clear???).However,I can hardly agree that the advertising is the main cause of unhealthy eating habits because even thougt though there are different kinds of advertising,they are usually about different category of food. ( you better break this sentance to make it more meaningful) And different kinds of food advertising is towards diverse audience in different kind of age stage.
labroy   
Oct 4, 2010
Writing Feedback / TOEFL; Company announces its wish to build to a large factory near your area [2]

Hi,
I'm new to the forum. Please help me with my toefl essay;

QUESTION; A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position.

The presence of a new factory could bring about both advantageous and disadvantageous impacts on our community. It certainly would be a positive influence on the unemployed youth. However, the new factory may impose several environmental threats to our community which is proud of its environment that has a unique beauty and high tranquility.

To begin with, the new factory would require a significant labor force. The unemployed ...
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