Writing Feedback / IELTS: Government should make more effort to promote alternative sources of energy. [NEW]

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Topic:
Government should make more effort to promote alternative sources of energy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

Answer:
The increasing population and the technological advancements demand more energy than in the past. It is believed that there are various other resources such as the nuclear and solar which are abundant and eco-friendly. I will analyze these areas in the essay.

Firstly, the major source of energy today is water. Although there is a lot of water shortage to generate electricity many countries still rely only on this source. To generate such a vast energy the fundamental resources are falling short. Thus, during summer there will be a lot of power cut in the developing countries such as India. If the government encourage the use of nuclear, solar or wind energy there might not be any problem in distributing the required amount electricity. Therefore, it would be a good implication by the government to generate electricity from other available sources.

Secondly, the sources most widely used currently to generate power releases extensive amount of gases into the atmosphere which increases global warming. For example, the use of a solar cooker instead of an electric cooker would certainly reduce the global warming. In the same way, the use of nuclear energy as an alternative to the hydro-kinetic energy causes less atmospheric pollution.

To conclude, it would be a better implication by the government to promote other sources of energy. This can make use of the available natural resources which in turn would reduce the global warming. Further, government should motivate and encourage the people to use alternative sources such as the solar and the nuclear energy

Writing Feedback / Does air travel creates a great deal of pollution and consumes resources? [4]

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Topic:
Some people think that air travel creates a great deal of pollution and consumes a considerable amount of fuel resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons and examples from your own personal experience.

Answer:
In today's world many people consider visiting different places during their vacation as a valuable and exciting experience of life. Due to lack of time and to have a luxurious feeling many consider traveling by air to other means of transport. However, it is believed such transportation causes extreme pollution and also uses a large amount of resources available. This essay emphasizes on some of the facts associated with air travel.

Firstly, the pollution caused by the flights is more than double as compared to other modes of transport available. Because of the use of natural resources as fuel a huge amount of carbon dioxide is released into the air which pollutes it. Not only the air pollution, flights also cause noise pollution which possibly affects the birds more than anyone else.

Secondly, the quantity of fuel required by the flights is very high. As the number of people traveling increase, the number of flights carrying them will be more and so does the resources required. By the use of these natural resources a day might come when there are no fuel resources for the air travel. Therefore, various nations are researching for the fuel resources which may not fall short in the future and also cause less pollution.

On the other hand, though air travel has a number of disadvantages, the advantages are much more significant. The traveling time is 10 times less than other modes, which is extremely important in the modern era.

In the nutshell, traveling by air is believed pollute the atmosphere and also consumes high amount of resources. It is agreed that the above statement is justified. On the other hand it also has a number of advantages which outweighs these disadvantages. Further, people usually neglect these demerits and the number of air travelers will certainly rise in the future.