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rubberman   
Nov 18, 2010
Undergraduate / "the Moika Palace in Russia on December 17, 1916" - going back in time [3]

5. Imagine that you have the opportunity to travel back through time. At what point in history would you like to stop and why?
I would be at the Moika Palace in Russia on December 17, 1916 because Moika Palace is the place of Grigori Rasputin's death. Grigori Rasputin was a peasant who claimed to have healing and premonition powers. Prince Felix Yusupov decided to murder Rasputin. On December 17, 1916 Prince Felix served Rasputin cake filled with enough cyanide to kill five people but was unaffected after eating the cake. Felix then shot Rasputin on his back. Rasputin didn't die so Yusupov shot him two more times. Rasputin was shot on his back and on his head. He was thrown into the Moika River. His body was recovered and an autopsy revealed that the cause of death was drowning. Rasputin's death is one of history's greatest mysteries because he was shot three times and poisoned but still didn't die. This essay represents me because I am intrigued by mysterious events/places that have not been explained. Mysterious events/places such as the disappearance of the Indus civilization, the pyramids, the Loch Ness Monster, and others excite me because they have not been explained and it always makes me think of what really happened. There are endless possibilities which is why I am fascinated by mysterious events/places.
rubberman   
Nov 17, 2010
Undergraduate / Essay A "My Mean Teacher" [4]

the choir teacher makes a singing bearable. Change to "a", "the" implies someone who you have not specified and you dont have to.

Those influences can be sometimes welcoming to a person but in my case the person that changed my life significantly caused many negative feelings to overcome me. You have to rewrite the sentence. The sentence implies that influences and person are the same thing.

Everything started my fourth grade year here in the United States. You might need to add "in" in the sentence.
Garza, no matter how much despised she is to me , is the person that has influenced my life the most.
That part doesnt make sense, you should say "no matter how much I despised her"
rubberman   
Nov 17, 2010
Undergraduate / Transparency for School Funding - UT Application Essay 2 (An Issue of Importance) [4]

Community and money is the support for everything in our world. Change is to are. I know what your are trying to say but you still have to change it because that is gramatically incorrect. Also try to add a little more about how the significance of that issue to yourself, your family, your community, or your generation. You added how it impacted your community but try to expand it just a little
rubberman   
Nov 7, 2010
Undergraduate / "Math comes naturally to m" - help me and revise my UMD essay [6]

According to Henry David Thoreau, "One is not born into the world to do everything, but to do something." What is your something?

My something is math. For as long as I can remember, math has been my favorite subject. Every time I go to school, I get excited whenever I go to my math class. Math comes naturally to me and is easy to understand. The reason I love math is probably because I came from India which teaches higher level math at a young age. I remember when I was taking Trigonometry, everyone in the class was struggling because they didn't understand it. I ended up doing well in that class since it wasn't very hard for me. I tried to do really good in other academic subjects but they didn't come naturally to me. Right now, I am taking calculus and even though it is a hard course, I still love doing problems. Since math is easy for me, I am thinking of pursuing a major that involves math.
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