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Dec 15, 2010
Undergraduate / Communities of "Chinese youths with multi-culture background"----essay for UMich [4]
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wish you merry Christmas ~
brilliant advise
wish you merry Christmas ~
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Dec 15, 2010
Undergraduate / Communities of "Chinese youths with multi-culture background"----essay for UMich [4]
Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it. (Approximately 250 words)
"A supplement essay for UMich. Need help of natives. Thanks a loooooooooot!"
I belong to a community in which Chinese youths with multi-culture background are striving for broader communication and extensive collaborations between China and world. People in this community grow up in a multi-cultural environment. For instance, it is common for us to discuss over topics with international students and get to know about different places on the planet through contact with them. Besides, numbers of Chinese students participate in the Model United Nations and other international activities every year, promoting communications with other cultures. In addition, people in this community keep themselves updated with the fast changing world. We talk about hits on billboard after class; follow the current progress of U.S. presidential election and pay attention to modern science and technology developments. Except for those who live in homeland, there are also lots of overseas students propagating Chinese culture and absorbing foreign knowledge. Consequently, a great number of Chinese students with combined ideology of both traditional eastern and modern western are making great efforts to help China's internationalization and modernization.
But in my university, there are classmates who are from remote areas and don't have much access to the outer world so I decided to help them develop the habit to learn about the western world. Therefore I would describe my place as a propagator of the special ideology of the community. I recommend first class English movies and books to them and exchange opinions of international topics such as the policy of health care in USA with them. Furthermore, I joined an organization aiming at promoting international communication to spread the ideology of my community. Little as I do, I still can make a difference.
Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it. (Approximately 250 words)
"A supplement essay for UMich. Need help of natives. Thanks a loooooooooot!"
I belong to a community in which Chinese youths with multi-culture background are striving for broader communication and extensive collaborations between China and world. People in this community grow up in a multi-cultural environment. For instance, it is common for us to discuss over topics with international students and get to know about different places on the planet through contact with them. Besides, numbers of Chinese students participate in the Model United Nations and other international activities every year, promoting communications with other cultures. In addition, people in this community keep themselves updated with the fast changing world. We talk about hits on billboard after class; follow the current progress of U.S. presidential election and pay attention to modern science and technology developments. Except for those who live in homeland, there are also lots of overseas students propagating Chinese culture and absorbing foreign knowledge. Consequently, a great number of Chinese students with combined ideology of both traditional eastern and modern western are making great efforts to help China's internationalization and modernization.
But in my university, there are classmates who are from remote areas and don't have much access to the outer world so I decided to help them develop the habit to learn about the western world. Therefore I would describe my place as a propagator of the special ideology of the community. I recommend first class English movies and books to them and exchange opinions of international topics such as the policy of health care in USA with them. Furthermore, I joined an organization aiming at promoting international communication to spread the ideology of my community. Little as I do, I still can make a difference.
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Dec 15, 2010
Writing Feedback / TOEFL: 'tiny problems' CHILDHOOD IS THE HAPPIEST TIME OF A PERSON'S LIFE. [3]
First of all, I do agree with the statement of 'Childhood is the happiest time of a person time', Childhood refers to the time when we were small, about 4 to 11 years old.
The first reason is that when we were kids, we have no responsibility or problem to think of. We have more time to play with toys and friends, we were treated like princesses by our parents, and we didn't have the complicated and heavy problems to think. Maybe the biggest problem when we were small is what color to choose for drawing.
The next reason to support my statement is that childhood is the best time for us to gain knowledge and understand the life. When we were young, of course we were eager to try many things. We try to ride bicycles , we try to catch grasshopper, and we even play with mud and sand! With this adventure, it actually starts to build interests and give us the experiences that we cannot replace with anything when we become older.
That is why we can see most of people like to think back to their childhood especially when they are getting older. Some of people, when they already have their own children,they bring them to village. Parents are telling their children about their childhood time, teach them some game which they had played. Sometimes even the grandmother or grandfather tells the grandkids some silly and funny stories about their parents when they were young.
In conclusion, with the reasons and examples i giveat above, I do strongly agree that 'Childhood is the happiest time of a person's life'. The childhood time is the best time in life, the experiences we have been through is irreplaceable and it will be cherished in our mind.
1.I strongly suggest you to write with Microsoft Word which will automatically check grammar errors for you.
2.You can reorganize the opinions and try various sentence structures.
That's all. Hope you improve your English level soon.
First of all, I do agree with the statement of 'Childhood is the happiest time of a person time', Childhood refers to the time when we were small, about 4 to 11 years old.
The first reason is that when we were kids, we have no responsibility or problem to think of. We have more time to play with toys and friends, we were treated like princesses by our parents, and we didn't have the complicated and heavy problems to think. Maybe the biggest problem when we were small is what color to choose for drawing.
The next reason to support my statement is that childhood is the best time for us to gain knowledge and understand the life. When we were young, of course we were eager to try many things. We try to ride bicycles , we try to catch grasshopper, and we even play with mud and sand! With this adventure, it actually starts to build interests and give us the experiences that we cannot replace with anything when we become older.
That is why we can see most of people like to think back to their childhood especially when they are getting older. Some of people, when they already have their own children,
In conclusion, with the reasons and examples i give
1.I strongly suggest you to write with Microsoft Word which will automatically check grammar errors for you.
2.You can reorganize the opinions and try various sentence structures.
That's all. Hope you improve your English level soon.
hyxhyxhhyx
Dec 15, 2010
Undergraduate / "Quality of teaching; Research Centers" - why is Emory College [3]
Becoming a successful business man is always my the stepping stone to achieve long-term goal of helping the less fortunate.
Becoming a successful business man is always my the stepping stone to achieve long-term goal of helping the less fortunate.
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Dec 14, 2010
Undergraduate / "a volunteer program at a care center of mentally disabled" extracurricular activity [3]
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (150 words or fewer, 1000 character maximum)
In the last spring semester, I attended a volunteer program at a care center of mentally disabled. After the presentations we prepared, something astonishing happened at the free communication part.
One of them came forward, asked my name and wrote it neatly on the blackboard with beautiful calligraphy. So nice was the writing that I even desired to print it down and take it away with me. What's further beyond my imagination was the fact that he even mastered several languages including Japanese and Korean. Totally amazed, we finished the trip and left the center.
Before the visit, what mentally disabled people were like in my mind were less intelligent people achieving nothing, but this impression was totally altered after this trip. And I felt a bit ashamed of holding that attitude before. I also realized that disabled people, as well as other unfortunate people, deserve more attention and compassion.
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (150 words or fewer, 1000 character maximum)
In the last spring semester, I attended a volunteer program at a care center of mentally disabled. After the presentations we prepared, something astonishing happened at the free communication part.
One of them came forward, asked my name and wrote it neatly on the blackboard with beautiful calligraphy. So nice was the writing that I even desired to print it down and take it away with me. What's further beyond my imagination was the fact that he even mastered several languages including Japanese and Korean. Totally amazed, we finished the trip and left the center.
Before the visit, what mentally disabled people were like in my mind were less intelligent people achieving nothing, but this impression was totally altered after this trip. And I felt a bit ashamed of holding that attitude before. I also realized that disabled people, as well as other unfortunate people, deserve more attention and compassion.