Posts by DREAMGIRL

DREAMGIRL

Jan 15, 2011

Undergraduate / My Low Self-Esteem - experience UVM [4]

Dint use such informal language like ''sucks'' and don't write that obesity is a SIN!
There r some typing errors and focus more on the faith and recovering part than how u pushed ppl away and was so self destructive and also mention what changd your attitude.

Wish u luck...

DREAMGIRL

Dec 29, 2010

Undergraduate / "why I want to be an environmental engineer" (your world, family, community) [7]

Aren't you violating the 250 words word limit. Your essay is almost double the limit.
And help me with this too that can I write 500 words too If my life is too big for 250?

DREAMGIRL

Dec 25, 2010

Undergraduate / "The snowballs effect, a doctor" - Sophie Davis Admission [4]

Your second para was too repetitive about how your mother wanted to b a doctor but couldn't...

DREAMGIRL

Dec 23, 2010

Undergraduate / "Love for art" - JHU short answer--art and culture [2]

Its a great essay. However u can add what u did previously in terms of arts like art competition or member of the art club in school... Otherwise its well-written and researched.

DREAMGIRL

Dec 21, 2010

Student Talk / HARVARD and JHU Supplement - general? What's the difference? [3]

When they ask major would u chose and why did u choose the way u did, it has to be general, doesn't it? Like no mention of Johns Hopkins ....just why I want to take Bio and be a doctor???

Also for Harvard supplement about books that have affected you...u just have to describe the effect of those books only...nothing new...nothing Harvard-related...???

DREAMGIRL

Dec 21, 2010

Undergraduate / Cornell CAS essay..interests, their evolution, and How Cornell.."Med Research Mecca" [6]

you can add more experience about being a doctor's child and then liking medicine...u cud add more names like amit, or how u had more to do than Amy and etc...

DREAMGIRL

Dec 21, 2010

Undergraduate / Brown Supplement - What don't you know?? Music and other things.. [5]

You can also briefly write about other stuff other than music that u dont know about.

DREAMGIRL

Dec 21, 2010

Undergraduate / "From India to Pakistan" - HELP COMMON APP ESSAY [3]

MY Essay is my life story. In the beginning I wrote the following lines. I don't like the it. Can somebody help me with this.

60 years ago my grandpa migrated from Hyderabad, Deccan in India to Pakistan. He had worked hard for Pakistan's creation and so migrated to see the fruit of his labor and give his family a better future.

Then my dad left his small hometown to find better education and job opportunities for himself and his family in a big city.
Today I am heading to world's greatest colleges to find a future for myself and my country.