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Rouge

Dec 27, 2010

Undergraduate / "a reanimated (and sentient) Lucy" - NYU Mini-essay 3 [2]

The Question:
If you had the opportunity to bring any person -- past or present, fictional or nonfictional -- to a place that is special to you (your hometown or country, a favorite location, etc), who would you bring and why? Tell us what you would share with that person.

My Answer:

I'd like to bring a reanimated (and sentient) Lucy, the A. afarensis, to the top of Makindye Hill, Uganda. From my grandmother's house there, you can see the whole city of Kampala stretched out beneath you. I would take Lucy up there and show her how the world has changed. About the great, wonderful and terrible things we've done. That we've lasted, and that we're still going strong, and that there's so much more out there for us to find and to do. Then we'd share a pizza and call it a day.

Any advice? Corrections? Was my word play off?
Thanks,
Rouge

PS: It's only 2 under the character limit (which I was rather proud of), but I can't really fit much more in... If corrections, include what can be deleted? Much obliged. :)

Rouge

Dec 24, 2010

Undergraduate / New York City - Why Columbia (insert school name here)? [6]

Hello, again. Complete 'Columbia' rewrite

So, I tried to do something different for my Columbia essay, then looked at it again, and realized it was rather crap. Here's my take two. Advice? Input? Criticism much appreciated!

I don't know where I'm going yet. I know bits and pieces, sure; I've known that I wanted to go to school on the east coast since I was little, because of the culture and diversity. The idea of New York as a crossroads of all cultures had me completely enamored, and it's somewhere I'd want to end up, no matter what. And Columbia's right in the middle of that. I don't know where I'm going yet, but I know that, no matter what I decide to study, I want to write. Columbia has one of the strongest writing programs in the U.S., creative as well as journalistic, and that's an area I want to go into, and one that I definitely want to see grow. I don't know where I'm going yet, but I know that this is one of the only schools that I'm interested in with an actual archaeology major, and that I'm in love with the centered, closed-off-from-city-madness grounds. I don't know exactly where I'm going yet, no. But I know that what I like best about Columbia is its options; I know that, wherever I decide to go, it's the best place to start. I like it for its springboard, and I like it for all the possibilities it offers.

Rouge

Dec 24, 2010

Undergraduate / "NYU is 'In and of the City' and..." -NYU Prompt [6]

I think I'm going to have to join with the others. #1 does seem to fit the prompt the best. It's not as stiff and number 2, and not as awkward as 3. I'd expand on that one.

Ooh, and that's just about the character limit, isn't it? -_- I hate that.
But, I think 1's a winner. Just try to fit in something about you yourself, on a more personal level. What diversity have you seen? How do you think diversity changes a person? etc, etc.

a true salad bowl representing every kind of person -- this is a bit strangely phrased.

Altogether, I think you did really well for the character limit.

Rouge

Dec 24, 2010

Undergraduate / "self- reliant, sincere, serious, and determined" - NCSSM essay about personality [2]

I think it's good-- it sums up some great characteristics. I think you could improve it a bit by going a bit more personal. Like, instead of only the characteristics, maybe a more in depth example? Either way, it works.

Rouge

Dec 23, 2010

Undergraduate / New York City - Why Columbia (insert school name here)? [6]

Thanks for the input. ^^ editing now.

Rouge

Dec 21, 2010

Undergraduate / New York City - Why Columbia (insert school name here)? [6]

While I am almost positively sure that the 'Why (insert school name here)" mini-essays are a little bit redundant ("Because you're my backup! Wait, no... >_>") and maddening, I'm giving it my best shot. I'm wondering if I could get help for my WHY COLUMBIA essay?

Here goes it...

WHY COLUMBIA?

New York winters are cold. Or so I hear, at the very least. Cold, and blustery, and brilliantly snowy. I like the snow.

New York City is a geographical sardine can. So many people, so little space. It's barely plausible. I like the irony.

New York is a fashion, cultural, art and underground transportation hotspot of the world. It's a crossroads. I appreciate the diversity.

And, of course, Columbia College is located in the heart of New York City. Disregard the fact that I'm incredibly enamored with the film studies program, or that this is one of the only schools that I'm interested in with an actual archaeology major, or that I'm in love with the centered, closed-off-from-city-madness grounds. Ignore the notion that I'd wanted to study journalism at Columbia since I was eleven, after realizing that yes, there was a way to write and make money at the same time. Forget how convinced I am that it would, in fact, be my first choice and how it'd be a perfect fit, with the humanities concentration and multidisciplinary outlook. Ignoring all that... It's in the middle of New York. And I don't think it could get much better.

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I wanted to make it a little bit... not flippant, but more casual. Any suggestions?
Thanks for reading.