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sharman93   
Dec 24, 2010
Undergraduate / "The Indian Institute of Technology" -- Significant Experience - IIT preparation [2]

Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.

In India there are some institutions that specialize solely on training students to prepare for the entrance examinations of the premier engineering colleges here - The Indian Institute of Technology (IITs). Invariably the good ones amongst them have a success rate of around 50%. The competition hence in these institutes is very intense and at times bordering on the verge of paranoia!

After finishing my class 10, for my Plus 2, I joined one of them. I had in all my years at school, been amongst the top 5 in my class without really working long hours to achieve that. I was also pursuing tennis on the pro circuit. As such I felt I was good enough to be amongst the best in academics whilst pursuing tennis - which in those years to me was a future profession as an option.

Joining this institute turned out to be an eye-opener. A leveler of sorts. I realized that over the years an element of complacency had gotten into me. I saw that competing to gain admission into premier institutes in India, particularly the IITs, is as good as competing with the world's best. This competition is magnified further given the one-dimensional pursuit in India, where if one does not get into a top engineering college, he or she is almost branded a failure in life.

A painful period of realization and self-analysis then followed. I found myself, at times, vacillating between the "fight or flee" extremes! I had to weigh my options and take a quick decision on my pursuits. I put tennis, my passion, on the backburner for a couple of years and played it occasionally as a refresher or hobby since these were my formative years from a career point of view. Realigning my focus, commitment and life pattern was not easy. In hindsight it is this phase last year that helped me mature. Giving up Tennis was a "sacrifice" of sorts. But I think the decision was right. I grew over the unsubstantiated "dream" phase and came to understand the meaning of the phrase 'no free lunch'.

I started studying with a renewed focus and commitment. I got into the top 25 percentile of my class - a category that has mostly made it into the top engineering colleges here in India. I learned that getting overawed and slouching shoulders only makes matters worse. I began to understand the message of the movie "Seabiscuit" a little better. When I first saw that movie it was more "entertainment". Now I have begun to see the underlying message - even if you are broken, there can be hope - for everybody - in their own little ways. But the journey is - to quote from the movie - "Brick by Brick"!

I also reconciled to the fact that I was pursuing a combination of Math's and Science in my current phase - Plus 2, here - in my current institute because in India there are no quality options at this stage to pursue business management, economics and commerce. Nevertheless, my present college has given me the opportunity to be with and compete with the best. That should stand me in good stead because it has helped me learn just how fierce the competition can get and also stand on par with my peers. Also, studying Math's and Science at this stage has helped in honing my logical reasoning skills better - which are vital for business and economics.

Thus, in spite of Engineering not being my first choice, this education and the environment, with my peers, has helped me prepare better in general for the rigors ahead. I have learned to perform well in areas that may not have been to my liking and thus developed a flexible approach to things. This juggling of goals and priorities and emerging from a state of flux, as a more purpose - filled individual with vivid and lucid dreams has been my greatest achievement yet. I have had to make tough decisions and have needed a tough resolve to stick with them.

Btw guys I'm applying to B-schools in general. So does it matter whether I've mentioned that I'm preparing for IIT. I mean I wont come across as muddled up, will I? Because here in India there arent really many choices in high school and I decided on undergrad business only once I entered high school....Any inputs will be appreciated, thanks.
sharman93   
Dec 24, 2010
Undergraduate / Engineering and intramural sports, extracurricular paths do you see yourself at Penn? [3]

'and that is the reason I should help at least one child ensure his/her bright future.'

I like working with kids of all ages, and I love learning, which I would like to pass on to any student I would tutor --- I think you should specify what exactly would you like to pass on (its a bit vague)

I think it should be student governments (plural)

You can also specify some of Penn's resources

Btw I'm applying to Penn too but Wharton...hope we both make it :)
sharman93   
Dec 24, 2010
Undergraduate / "Death of Father" significant experience essay [3]

I like your essay in that it has a really personal feel to it.

Here are some points that I think you can work on -

In your last line you mention that you ' defied their rules for me because I am an exception '. I think you should support this statement with some example or reasoning since it isn't really clear as to how you are an exception.

Same goes for your last line - what do you want to do to become a greater exception?

I may have misunderstood the last two lines but this is how I felt reading them...I think if you make the ending a bit clearer and more powerful the essay will be really good.
sharman93   
Dec 23, 2010
Undergraduate / Anticipated areas of study + Person: NYU supplement essays [NEW]

The limit is 500 characters so the responses may seem small....Btw I'm applying to Stern.

Please tell us what led you to select both your anticipated academic area(s) of study and the NYU school / college / program or the Abu Dhabi campus. What interests you most about your intended discipline? Mention any extracurricular or non-school-related activities or experiences that demonstrate your interest.

- Being born in Dubai, growing up there for twelve years and then coming back to India, the contrast between the two places struck me as odd at two levels. I encountered a far higher level of competition in almost all fields in India as compared to Dubai but India lagged far behind Dubai in almost all aspects of infrastructure, convenience and prosperity.

I thus realized the importance of issues like forms of government and public policy and their impact on businesses in different countries. My internship at a wealth management firm further demonstrated how business decisions are based on countries' policies. This connection between topics I had considered independent of each fascinated me and enhanced my resolve to take up the Business and Political Economy course at the Stern School of Business.

( I think the character count is 650...can someone help me shorten it because I cant figure out any way to do so)

If you had the opportunity to bring any person -- past or present, fictional or nonfictional -- to a place that is special to you (your hometown or country, a favorite location, etc), who would you bring and why? Tell us what you would share with that person.

- Lee Kuan Yew, the founder of modern day Singapore, is someone whom I would like to bring to India - my native country. LKY is easily one of the best political thinkers and strategists of the century. After all, he single handedly managed to transform Singapore from a third world, underdeveloped country to a first world, Asian Tiger. I would like to discuss the problems in the Indian economy with him and what changes should be made to the system in order for India to emulate the kind of success Singapore has had. The situation India finds itself in is quiet analogous to Singapore's past and if there's one person who can transform India, it is undoubtedly Lee Kuan Yew the 'nation builder'.

(Character count is 570...this needs to be shortened as well)

I really need your help in shortening the responses to 500 characters...any help will be greatly appreciated, thanks.
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