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"Whenever someone shuts the door..." - Common App Essay Help [6]
I wanted to
slink under the desk and hide
do you mean sink? because slink has a different connotation like moving stealthy.
"Look Jenny," he said, stroking the Thoreau beard at which I always laughed, "you're easily my most brilliant student, and at the same time, my most troubled..." he let his words linger, despite what he said about his speaking skills, he knew how to emphasize a point, "and therein lays the problem.
bit of an run on sentence...
He was wrong, however, in the assumption that I did not know
it . I knew
it then, and I have known
it for years, I just never wanted to address the issue.
maybe clarify "it" again?
The beginnings of our relationship were
tenuous at best
try to use a different word, tenuous again has a different meaning to it
Overall an excellent essay. However, maybe you can outline a few more points why this teacher is significant to you?