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karamsoft

Nov 10, 2011

Essays / How to start - How has the introduction of mobile phones made communication easy? [4]

I would talk about globalization and how the mobile helped in connecting people from different continents. Also, I would talk about smartphones, like iPhones and such, and how we can send emails in a second. Furthermore, talk about how cell phones can be a great resource for different aspects of the society. For example, talk about E-learning and how college students can access their notes and course materials in one click while in the bus. Talk about examples of societies in todays life that do not have cell phones and examine the advantages and the disadvantages of that. In addition, have at least one counter argument discussing in it how cell phones might be the reason for cancer(check Pubmed for great researched papers). But at the same time talk about other modern tools in the society that made it easy for cancer to evolve(like microwaves). However, do not try to include lots of points in your 12 page essay. Rather have 4 concrete points that will help the reader to be focused. Try to expand on the points rather than just stating them. You will probably find lots of info as you go along in the writing process and don't let the 12 page get you. In fact, the longer the essay the easier it is to write and develop the ideas, trust me on that.

Hope that helps.

karamsoft

Nov 10, 2011

Scholarship / The government determines the financial needs - grant essay [2]

You could add to that that grants are different than loans, as they are given to the student without the assumption that he/she should pay it back. That gives the student a peace of mind and so less stress and less pressure. Talk about what that means to the family, in the cases where the family is in a financial need and so on.. Talk about who it will reduces the need for the students to enter the workforce rather than go into a higher education, think about how that will improve the society and so on.

Hope that helps.

karamsoft

May 25, 2011

Essays / A Tribute essay to Our Mothers (Mother's Day) [3]

The 3rd paragraph and conclusion

And finally in our mature stages of life, our mothers encourage and support us, her children, until we become successful leaders. In this stage, we expand our knowledge and experience as adults and finally understand the meaning of our mothers to us, that unconditional relationship. And even if our paths are inscrutable and narrow, their urbane support and smiles helped us to pursue our dreams. For instance, William Wallace was not mistaken when he said "The hand that rocks the cradle is the hand that rules the world" in his poem about motherhood, because some of our mothers play a significant part in establishing great leaders who rule nations. For example: the president Martin Luther King was taught how to read by his mother before he started school. She also explained to him how the civil war ended with hate among the white and black people. Moreover, Sara Roosevelt helped in the success of her only child Franklin Roosevelt. She made sure that Franklin grew up in an atmosphere of privilege. She was always prepared with something positive about him, and tried to protect him. On the contrary, neither one of us, the children, would prefer to be busy with the politics than from our mothers sophisticated utopian world, where we hope to live until the eternity.

Undeniably, our mothers have taught us lessons of forgiveness, faith and morals. Those lessons need to be taught as a curriculum in schools. Our mothers nurtured, sacrificed and supported us so that we can be who we are today. How can we pay you back? Is it with pounds of flesh similar to Antonio's (From the Merchant of Venice) or with tons of gold alloys from the entire world? Yet undoubtedly, our mother's white heart will beat more with a small hug more than all these perishable "remnants" of this world. How can you pay back the sun and the water for their usefulness? When you could answer this question, which I doubt you could, then you could pay back your mother! Hence, I might have only described a drop in our mother's deep ocean of tenderness, but without that drop the ocean will be less.

karamsoft

May 25, 2011

Essays / A Tribute essay to Our Mothers (Mother's Day) [3]

Here is the 2nd paragraph:

In the secondary stages of our life, when we first got exposed to the world around us as teenagers, our mothers created the path for us and it was upon us to follow. They are the sunshine and water that nurture our trees. And when sunshine and water combine together, they create the rainbow that lights up our path with sparkling colors. They are the soil that helps our roots to hold rigidly on the path. And the stem that support us during our path in life. Our mothers are those who have established extremely high standards for us so that we always fell mediocre. They teach us forgiveness, and rehearse the lessons of morality over and over again. However, the true value lies not in what they teach us, but how we decide to interpret those lessons in our own life. They are women with exceptional courage, great faith and undeniably spectacular energy. Even the Prophet said "The heaven lies under the feet of the mothers" making them the most parable character on planet earth, who they are. Do you remember the person who was there on the parent-teacher attendance sheet, and may be the only one? Yes, it was your mother. They are the guiding light and inspiration in our path. Although, our mothers snow white heart teaches us forgiveness, it also teaches us on how to be tough too. In other words, helps us to be successful leaders.

karamsoft

May 25, 2011

Essays / A Tribute essay to Our Mothers (Mother's Day) [3]

I'm writing a tribute essay about mothers and Mother's day. Could you please check my grammar and the flaw of the ideas (essay). The idea of the first paragraph is to talk about the sacrifices our mothers make. The second paragraph will talk about their support during our teenage years and the third will talk about how they create a remarkable leaders for this nation.

So here is the Intro and the 1st paragraph

Do you still remember that proverbial kind of Band-Aids that helped your scraped knee to heal quickly? Well, it was not the kind of Band-aids that helped, but it was your mother's therapeutic kiss. The mother is that important person who sacrifices for you and falls in love with you just when you were a toddler filled with tantrums. She is the person who puts her children's needs over her own. She draws your path to success and supports you to be a leader. A day has been set aside for her on the second Sunday of every May. Unsurprisingly, that day is called "The Mother's Day". To that school where we learn without being taught, to that cave that ends with a warm tenderness, to the sunshine and water for our tree, to those who have carried formidable tasks, carried hardships, but still hold happiness, to no other person in the world, to our mothers.

In the early stages of our life, we cannot forget that person who changed our dippers, stayed late for us and sacrificed with everything she had just for us. The mother's job is anything but easy. She often takes the fallout for the toddler tantrums and the teenage angst. Despite that, she generally loves her children, us, no matter what we do. We learn from our mother's congenital kindness and faith which is stronger than the base of Burj Khalifa that keeps it from falling at that formidable height. We sometimes extol our mother's sacrifices as we were weak sperms and infants, yet, we cannot describe her "real" sacrifices and hardships unless we experience them. For example: Al-Khansa'a was a mother of only three children, however she encouraged them and sacrificed with all of them to liberate Palestine until all of them died. Nonetheless, with full faith, she prayed for all of them to go to heaven. Moreover, mothers always pray for the goodness of her children's life in this world and also what comes after. They care for us as if we are golden treasures that they are eager to protect from harmful humans and incidents. In the middle of the nights, when the world seems unpopulated and when everyone asleep, she remains awake to check our needs when we are sick. And even if she is a weak human being physically, she still manages to gather all her strength and does a lot of works for her children, us. We cannot count every deed our mothers made to let us live better. Before birth, their body was in pain to carry us in their wombs for about nine months. They vomited their food; they suffered from headaches, and felt the weakness of their body every morning. But because they are mothers, they never complain. They make all these sacrifices wholeheartedly without anything in return. Our mother's care is priceless; it has been gifted to us from their tender heart. In spite of all her sacrifices, you still wonder why you need to honour her. Do you remember who worked overtime and did whatever possible to afford your primary's school uniform? Simply the world will not spine without her!

karamsoft

May 24, 2011

Essays / How do I start an "A" essay on,"Is lying wrong or sometimes right." [8]

Is the essay an opinion based essay or is it an argument kind, persuasive essay.
If it is an opinion based then start by answering the question yourself, then write how or how not your spirit agree with you.
Try to ask this question write in the beginning but don't give your answer until the end (be creative).

Good luck!

karamsoft

May 24, 2011

Scholarship / what is the importance of expanding professional networks to develop your country? [7]

Think about what a connection will create, ie: look at websites like Linkin and so forth and their importance of improving the communication on the web. and so forth.

Think about how your country will benefit from its own students taking a master or a PhD degree from ie. the university of Harvard or any similar institute.

Try to expand those ideas

karamsoft

Feb 27, 2011

Book Reports / Describe Satire in Gulliver's Travels [2]

Hello,

The essay question is "Describe Satire in Gulliver's Travels". word limit 1000 words.
Please check Grammar, idea, and the flaw of the essay . And give me some feedback on it {Your opinion }. Thanks

Satire in Gulliver's Travels

Satire is a literary genre of Greek origin (satyr), in which human folly and vice are held up to scorn, derision, or ridicule. Although satire is usually meant to be funny, its purpose is often irony or sarcasm, ideally with the intent of shaming individuals, religion, and communities themselves, into improvement. In Gulliver's Travels, satire is shown through narration, setting, character, and plot. Jonathan Swift uses utopia and dystopia as elements of setting, and he uses a flat character, miser and tyrant type of character, moral touchstone, and grotesque to illustrate the character element of his satirical novel.

Jonathan Swift has chosen a first-person narrator in his novel of Gulliver's Travels. The narrator is Gulliver who has been plunged into extraordinary and absurd circumstances during his four voyages to a multitude of strange lands around the globe. Although Gulliver's vivid and detailed style of narration makes it obvious that he is intelligent and well educated, his perceptions are naive and gullible. As an example, Gulliver is a naive consumer of the Lilliputians' grandiose imaginings, because he is cowed by their threats of punishment, and their formally worded condemnation of Gulliver on grounds of treason works quite effectively on the naive Gulliver, forgetting that they have no real physical power over him. Gulliver is a round character which is a kind of character who encounters conflict and is changed by it. He changes in relation to the places he visits and the events that befall him as he voyages. As an example, he is the giant in Lilliput and he is worried about trampling on the Lilliputians, while he is at risk of being trampled upon and he is treated as a doll in the land of Brobdingnag. In his last voyage, he develops such a love for the Houyhnhnms society that he no longer desires to return to humankind. And he becomes more and more narrow-minded as the story progresses. On the whole, Gulliver proves to be more resilient that the average man by managing to survive the disastrous shipwrecks and the foreign people.

The setting in Gulliver's Travels explores the idea of utopia and dystopia. Utopia is an imaginary model of the ideal community. The Houyhnhnms represent an ideal of rational existence because they are reasonable, rational characters, and they seem to embody the principle virtue of friendship and benevolence, and all the perfections that humans strive to achieve. Their language does not have negative words such as lie, deceit, war, and evil. Their society builds simple houses, and it has a sound knowledge of medical herbs and poetry. They breed cleanliness and civility in their young and exercise them for speed and strength, because they are concerned more with the community than their own personal advantages. The Houyhnhnms are used as objects of satire, particularly when the inconsistencies in their character and behaviour are reflective of paradoxes in human thoughts and faults. Utopia could turn into dystopia, for the reason that Houyhnhnms could not have a true sense of good if they do not know what the evil is, and their lives seem lacking vigour, challenge, and excitement. Therefore the Houyhnhnms' society is perfect for Houyhnhnms, but it is hopeless for humans.

On the other hand, dystopia is a creation of a nightmare world where the conditions and the quality of life are extremely bad. Dystopia is illustrated through the Yahoos. The Yahoos are more primitive than humans. Their behaviour reflects the decadent and irrational behaviour of the civilized humans. For example, Yahoos fight with other groups and each other without apparent reason. Also their avarice for certain shiny stones of no practical use can be paralleled to contemporary societies' possessions of material such as jewellery. Swift uses the Yahoos as an example of greed and selfishness of humans. The Yahoos are entirely bestial and Gulliver's first meeting with them greatly disgust him "Upon the whole, I never behold in all my travels so disagreeable an animal, nor one against which I naturally conceived so strong an antipathy" (Swift 170).

The satirical element of character is illustrated through flat character, type of character, moral touchstone, and grotesque. A flat character is relatively uncomplicated and do not change throughout the course of a work. Swift uses the king of Lilliput as a flat character and he pictures the king as a powerful and greedy man who is very proud of himself. The king's government uses performance such as jumping high on a tight rope in order to obtain the vacant position in the government. This shows how the king's power eventually makes him care more about personal entertainment than the kingdom. In addition to that, the king's commands for Lilliputians to break their eggs on the small end first, illustrate the act of pride because the king wishes to make everyone subject to his will.

As well as using a flat character, the character element of the novel includes the greedy and the tyrant character type. For instance, the farmer of Brobdingnag plays the role of the greedy that puts Gulliver on display to profit from spectacular viewing of Gulliver performing tricks. Furthermore, the farmer starves Gulliver to death and resolves to make as much money as possible before Gulliver dies by selling him to the queen.

As an illustration of tyranny, Swift uses the king of Laputa. When the king wants to punish a particular region of the country, he can keep the floating island above it, depriving the lands below of the sun and rain. Similarly, the king is oblivious to the real concerns of the people below as he has never been below.

Also, the character element of a satirical novel uses moral touchstone. The moral touchstone is an excellent quality or example that is used to test the excellence or genuineness of others. In this case, the two moral touchstones of the novel are Glumdalclitch and Don Pedro. Glumdalclitch takes care of Gulliver, and she becomes his friend and nursemaid. She makes Gulliver several sets of new clothes, she delightedly dresses him, she puts him in her closet at night to sleep, and she teaches him the Brobdingnagian language. Don Pedro treats Gulliver with great patience and hospitality, even tenderness, when he allows him to travel on his ship. He offers him food, drink, and clothes. He also gives Gulliver twenty pounds for his journey to England.

Together with flat, type, and moral touch stone. Grotesque is another element of the satirical character. Grotesque is strangely or fantastically distorted. It is embodied in the magnified world of Brobdingnag. In the magnified world of Brobdingnag, everything takes on new levels of complexity and imperfection, demonstrating that the truth about object is heavily influenced by the observer's perspective. For instance, the smoothest skin of the most appealing ladies has imperfections, and these imperfections are bound to be exposed under close scrutiny. Gulliver describes "Their Skins appeared so coarse and uneven, so variously coloured when I saw them near" (108). In a sense, what looks perfect to us is not actually perfect; it is simply not imperfect enough for our limited senses of notice.

Furthermore, satire is shown through the plot of journey and return. The Lilliputians symbolize humankind's widely excessive pride in its own puny existence because, in spite of the small size of the Lilliputians, they do not consider the notion that Gulliver is enormous compared to them and could kill them with just a flick of his finger. Gulliver has learned that their society suffers from the same flaws inherent in the English society (rebellions over relatively minor issues), but their society is more utopian compared to the English society. On the contrary, the people of Brobdingnag are peaceful and fair, and not violent and cruel as the people of Europe have been. This is illustrated with the King of Brobdingnag's conclusion about European society, "I cannot but conclude hte Bulk of your Natives to be the most pernicious Race of little odious Vermin" (121). In his fourth voyage, Gulliver has seen unusual societies. The Yahoos represent human follies, greed and selfishness, while the Houyhnhnms represent humanity free of strife and hardship. The Houyhnhnms seem like model citizens, and Gulliver's intense grief when he is forced to leave them suggests that they have made an impact on him greater than that of any other society he has visited.

In conclusion, Gulliver's travels uses satire through narration, setting, character, and plot to illustrate the weaknesses of human, and suggest ways of improvement. In other words, the novel portrays the ideal (or not so ideal) society and how Swift views England. Each society has its own exaggerated feature. The Lilliputians presents the animalistic nature of humanity. Man's capability of reason is shown in the Brobdingnagians. The bestial characteristic is shown through the Yahoos. The highest ideal for man, however, is best represented by the Houyhnhnms. Therefore, the Houyhnhnms serve as an example of the ideal for man.

Gulliver changes his attitudes and his perceptions of people because of the different societies he encounters. At the beginning, he is a standard issue European adventurer; by the end, he has become a misanthrope who totally rejects human society.

karamsoft

Feb 27, 2011

Student Talk / Predictable topics for Toefl Essays? [5]

Hello,
You can't predicate the essay topics that will be given this year, but there is usually a set of general topics that have a potential to be on the exam. check these two site :

learn4good.com/languages/toefl/writingtopics.htm
testmagic.com/test/index.asp

I'm not sure how they chose their topics but all I could say is that they usually stick with general (more personal topics).
Hopefully that answers your question
Good luck,

karamsoft

Feb 14, 2011

Student Talk / Need-based scholarship; how do i demonstrate my financial need? [4]

HI Kunle,

Thanks for mentioning the criteria of the scholarship. I believe (And that what I usually do) that when a scholarship criteria mentions academic excellence first, that they need you to be successful. and to break that barrier (3) of financial need. This is the reason for the significant of academic success first, because no one would like to fund someone education when he/she didn't even put time and work on it. So for your essay you could mention (and try to find) the program of your interest (what do you want to study in the future) and then mention the fees for the program and how their scholarship will give you time to study more, research more or even doing a community volunteer. And relate that to your average right now (be creative) and how you have the potential to develop your skills (2) by having that extra time for yourself. anyways be confident with your abilities and try to inspire the judges (which I believe that I wasn't be able to achieve until now, but I hope that you will!)

Good luck. :)

karamsoft

Dec 31, 2010

Scholarship / The importance of education after high school - [NEW]

The importance of education - how furthering your education after high school will make your dreams become true?

Please check my essay for things like essay development, organization, essay flaw, grammar, and relevance to the theme. (as the instruction states)

The limit is 250 words

Dreams that could Come True

From the beginning of my childhood, my inspirational dream was to be a physician who could heal all the world's patients and share happiness. I was impressed by my uncle success, as he was one of the rare professional doctors in his town. But I knew that such a high thinking and achievable person cannot be possible without higher education. Through my past education years, they had improved me to be a great thinker, helped me to be a mature person, and it had developed a great sense of the applications around me. By continuing my education after high school: I could get more knowledge about the human body; I could develop career skills that they would help me to do my job easily; and also it would help me earn a PhD degree in medicine, so I could share my knowledge to the upcoming inspired students. Today, I feel that I cannot be more satisfied with my career than being part in alleviating someone's pains. Although, there is some successful individuals that didn't even finish college, like Bill Gates, and Jennifer Aniston, but that is simply rare. They had luck by their side and also had met the right people. As Shakespeare quotes "To climb steep hills requires a slow pace at first" I know that there is a long trip that I should go through first. Moreover, the moral profession of the physician often has a continuing education to improve their skills and open their eyes-wide on researches.